The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client. “Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last year that region experienced twenty days with below-average temperatures, and local weather forecasters throughout the region predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes have been built in this region during the past year. Because of these developments, we predict an increased demand for heating oil and recommend investment in Consolidated Industries, one of whose major business operations is the retail sale of home heating oil.”
In the letter from a firm advices a client to invest in industries which sell home heating oil as their major buisisness. The firm comes to this conclusion of investment due to usage of oil as major fuel for heating homes in northern united states. Before consedering this idea client must think about the possible assumptions made by the firm which are presented below.
Firstly, the firm assumes that only because the are in the north of the United States experienced temperatures below average in last year, there might be the same atmosphere as last year. Not only it is capricious to assume the weather also it is bit senseless to expect the nature to be same as the past. It is true to follow local weather forecasters' prediction but also it is very high risk for a client to invest money into merely predections. However, if the firm would have presented the accuracy rates of prediction sof forecasters it might have became an idea which can be given thought to.
Furthermore, the firm states that there has been increase in the number of new homes in the area. So, the usage of oil for heatin their homes would increase. Yet, it is possible that may be these new houses have been only built ibn the area and not being used this year to live or the people living their might use electric devices or woods through thr chimney to heat their houses. Also, as they mentioned before that the weather might stay same in upcoming years. If that is come to be true, there would be number of people who may migrate to another area. Hence, it would be quite helpful to look into the number of people who would be staying into the area.
Lastly, it might be true that people would be using the oil to heat their houses, yet the firm could present the number of people using it. The number may provide the proof of benefit in the business of investing money in selling oil. It is possible that so many people there might be using other ways of heating their house.
Hence, as the assumptions presented above shows that the argument is flawed. The firm may provide more evidence based on research to pursue the client to invest money there.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1716 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.446 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.217 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 36 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.41 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.331 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'advice'?
Suggestion: advice
In the letter from a firm advices a client to invest in industries which ...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eating homes in northern united states. Before consedering this idea client must think...
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Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tly, the firm assumes that only because the are in the north of the United States exper...
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Line 2, column 248, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'bitten'.
Suggestion: bitten
...icious to assume the weather also it is bit senseless to expect the nature to be sa...
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Line 2, column 343, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'forecasters'' or 'forecaster's'?
Suggestion: forecasters'; forecaster's
...st. It is true to follow local weather forecasters prediction but also it is very high ris...
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Line 2, column 471, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had presented'?
Suggestion: had presented
...erely predections. However, if the firm would have presented the accuracy rates of prediction sof fo...
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Line 2, column 555, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...rediction sof forecasters it might have became an idea which can be given thought to. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54922279793 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26157938957 2.78398813304 81% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474093264249 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3181075364 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5555555556 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289500521564 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100820070763 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944824723785 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170649238952 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856938170838 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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