The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
It is stated in a letter from the owner of the Sunny Side Towers Apartment to its manager that restricting the showerheads on the first five floors of the apartment will result a major savings for Sunny Side Corporation and in near future apply it to all the twenty floors will be beneficial in case of profit .However, before evaluating the argument which is cited by the owner ,some questions need to be answered to decide whether it will be beneficial to the corporation or not .
First of the all ,the first question that arises in mind after restricting the water flow in showerheads do the actual readings of water usage have really been adjusted comparing with the old ones? Here the author assumes that the owner of the house has actually reduced its usage which will eventually result in savings.Moreover,they didn’t know the exact amount of water which is used before adjusting .So, they basically cant compare whether by restricting will it save or eventually it will turn into a bad decision. Perhaps they might increase the water usage more than before .If either of these are true it will surely weaken the authors argument.
Secondly, Will it be a real scenario of water usage just to apply the water restrictions only to first five floors ? The Sunny Side apartment is an apartment which is consist of 20 floors .Perhaps,it might happen that the owner of first five floors might use less water, but the other remaining floors increase there water usage at a significant rate.In that case ,it will not be a savings of water, rather it will bring loss to Sunny Side Corporation while paying for the apartment water cost .If these become true ,the argument of the author of bringing more profit in near future will be surely doesn’t hold the water .
Thirdly, will it be really beneficial to restrict the water flow not even half ,just one third of its original flow?Well,it might happen that they do not have major complaints till now as its been only one month ,but within some months perhaps they might call into question about the facilities of the apartment. And they might give a thought, especially those people who live here giving rent ,to shift somewhere else.If all of these become true it will surely weaken the authors argument .
In the conclusion, as it stands now,is considerably flawed because of its proper justifications and numerous assumptions.If all of the questions which has been arise can be answered with proper reasons , the Sunny Side Corporation might give a shot to restrict all the apartments water supply and hope for a good amount of profit .
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2094 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.602 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.405 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.332 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.459 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.729 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89189189189 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65267160928 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452702702703 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 22.8473053892 214% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.339901318 57.8364921388 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 241.333333333 119.503703932 202% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.3333333333 23.324526521 212% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 5.70786347227 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 39.0 5.25449101796 742% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225968049798 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110723135233 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638540397618 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139719108034 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395739206517 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.3 14.3799401198 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.3550499002 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 12.197005988 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.97 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.6 11.1389221557 194% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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