The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
It is stated in a memo from the director of student housing of Bucking college that they should build more new attractive dormitories to cope up with the growing enrollment and it would increase the enrollment at Buckingham in near future .However before evaluating the argument which is cited by the director need to explain with proper evidence to show the flaws of the argument.
First of all ,though the current trending of enrollment is uprising in the Buckingham College will it be the same in the next fifty years? The author assumed that It will be more than double in the next fifty year for which new dormitories should be added .Perhaps it might not happen ,student can be attracted to other colleges .If other colleges offers more reasonable and fruitful programme with cheaper cost than Buckingham College, who knows they might call into question about it.As a result the enrollment can be alienated at a significant rate .If either of this happen the conclusion drawn in the above argument will surely be weakened .
Secondly the author assumed that the apartments in Buckingham town will be continue to risen up as it has been in the previous years. But what if the apartment price do not rise in the near future? If there does not occur any development in that particular city ,it might eventually lead to the reduction of the price of the apartments in college area. Perhaps the houses can be then affordable for the students. Moreover they might stay together to split up the rent price of the house .If the above is true the argument does not hold water and it will surely wear out the stated argument .
And lastly the author assumed that ATTRACTIVE dormitories would make prospective students interested about this college .But a prospective students obviously not only be interested just for the dormitories but also he will try to enroll in that college evaluating his future perspective ,his passion towards a subject and the other offers that Buckingham College will make available for the students .Perhaps he will think about all the pros and cons before admitting into a college as it is about his life decision.If either of the scenarios become true ,it is surely weakened the Authors argument in the above.
In conclusion ,as it stands now, is considerably flawed because of its proper justification and numerous assumptions. If author can more evidence regarding his argument about adding more attractive dormitories to attract students in Buckingham College might give a shot about his statement.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2070 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.848 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.639 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.923 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.587 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99294117647 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67427414084 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461176470588 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 177.676323783 57.8364921388 307% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 192.909090909 119.503703932 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.6363636364 23.324526521 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6363636364 5.70786347227 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.25449101796 704% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208913417989 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837646966614 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792451310425 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135113969802 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842698208578 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 14.3799401198 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 48.3550499002 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.