In the memo the director argues that their hospital system should supply UltraClean as it was proven to reduce the number of bacteria by 40 percent and infection cases dropped greatly in one of the hospital. This argument seems reasonable. However, it is based on a couple of assumptions. These assumptions needs to be further examined in order to prove the robustness of the argument.
First of all, this argument assumes that laboratory and hospital have the same situation. In practical use, there are many uncontrolled factors while in laboratory study settings are controlled and monitored by people. It is not reasonable to assume that people use UltraClean in laboratory have the same situation as those use UltraClean in hospital. For example, one different factor may be that people in laboratory and hospital have different types of bacteria on their hands. If there are too many differents factors in the two situations, it may not be logical use UltraClean in hospital system.
Futher, the director’s argument builds on the assumption that UltraClean will have similar effects in reducing the number of patient infection case at other hospital as that at hospital in WorkBy. Hosptials under the same system may have different functionalities which means hospital in Workby may be good at curing patient with some kinds of diseases while other hospitals are more professional in handling other diseases. Therefore, hospital in Workby accepts more patients with some specific diseases. Other hospitals may not have significant reduction in the number of patents infection as UltraClean is only powerful in killing bacteria that causes those diseases. The argument will be greatly weaken in this case.
Finally, this argument is based on the assumption that currently used liquid hand soaps can not prevent serious patient infections. This assumptions may not stands as the frequency that patients accepted by the hospital systems is not stated. The currently used liquid hand soaps may be effective enough in preventing infections but patients seldom use it. In this case, there is no need to offer UltraClean as infections are caused by the low frequency of using hand soaps.
In conclusion, the argument that the hospital systems should supply UltraClean in all hand-washing station to prevent serious infections depends on three assumptions. The argument assumes that laboratory and hospital have the same situation, UltraClean will have similar effects in reducing the number of patient infection case at other hospital as that at hospital in WorkBy and currently used liquid hand soaps can not prevent serious patient infections.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- Ok but need more. Look, it is a 'concentrated solution' not a 'regular solution'.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations throughout our hospital system.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2191 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.229 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.729 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'need'.
Suggestion: need
...ouple of assumptions. These assumptions needs to be further examined in order to prov...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35799522673 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84039026969 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412887828162 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.1951391791 57.8364921388 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.157894737 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107768716422 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413089469564 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366769408015 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732909308832 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0171018885755 0.0628817314937 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.