The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
This argument suggested a foreseeable increasing need for dormitory space because of the growing enrollment. However, it says according to the trend, it will double over the next 50 years. The suggested growing rate is doubtful because the population wouldn't grow endlessly given the low birth rate.
Even though it insisted the average rent in the town is rising, it failed to compare the rent of dormitory and off-campus housing. Just because the town's average rent is rising doesn't mean that it is definitely higher than the dormitory fee.
Will the new dormitories attract the students is also needed to be clarified. For some students, living in the dormitory may mean the obligation of obeying rules, while off-campus housing is complete freedom.
This argument failed to provide the status quo of capacity of the dormitory and how students feel about it. So it's dangerous to make this decision only thinking of the future.
Comments
e-rater score report
flaws:
No. of Words: 155 350
Minimum 250 words wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 155 350
No. of Characters: 762 1500
No. of Different Words: 96 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.528 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.916 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.583 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.457 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...rate is doubtful because the population wouldnt grow endlessly given the low birth rate...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ecause the towns average rent is rising doesnt mean that it is definitely higher than ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 55.5748502994 31% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 786.0 2260.96107784 35% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 153.0 441.139720559 35% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13725490196 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 4.56307096286 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62027113829 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 204.123752495 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627450980392 0.468620217663 134% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 705.55239521 34% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.4372469211 57.8364921388 37% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.3333333333 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121955220886 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504139786902 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467263185725 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070693334724 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440283690645 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 98.500998004 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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