The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. Due to this demand and the overall increase in clothing prices, we can predict that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the memo from the new vice precident of Sartorian, it is suggested that the profit of the Sartorian's alpaca overcoat will be at eminence this year. The new Vice precident came to this conclusion based on the fact that, their prouct had the better quality in comparision to the products available in market. So, since they discontinued the production of the ovrecoat the demand from the pent-up customer could rise. Howevr before this assumption three of the following questions must be answered.
FIrstly, it is baseless to assume that the new fabric will produce the same quality of the alpaca overcoat as before. The chances are 50-50 either it will make the similar or better product, or the quality of the product will decrease. Also, customer are susceptible to the PRevious quality of the product. The new fabric and its product market value and damand are no determined.
Secondly, If the new fabric produces the overcoat of inferior less quality, than the existing competators product will be preferred by the customers. Also, if the customer find some other company's product similar to that of Sartorian products, which was also at reasonable price, then it is groundless to assume that the previous customer of Sartorian are eagerly waiting for the alpaca overcoat to lunch.
Lastly, if demad for the overcoat is increasing then there will be the price inflation for the product in market. And, we are not provided with any facts and figures showing Sartorian's financial status. So, can Sartorian compete with their rivals in moneytary terms. If there arises a condition that the Saltorian overcoat's price is highre than those available in market then customer who finds the product expensive are highly unlikely to buy the products.
In conclusion, memo as it stands, has many flaws, due to its reliance on the false assumption. If the answers to the above queries are provided, then we can revaluate the reliability of the memo.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1586 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.895 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.564 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.159 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on to the products available in market. So, since they discontinued the production of the...
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Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e with their rivals in moneytary terms. If there arises a condition that the Salto...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01851851852 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61285439281 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8639693435 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.625 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6875 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230328669042 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763853507191 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430046367541 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125068169569 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421146555902 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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