The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food-distribution company with food-storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently we signed a contract with The Fly-Away Pest-Control Company to provide pest-control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest-Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff Company for all our pest-control services."
Vice president of the food distribution company discredited the recently replaced pest control services because the warehouse suffered from the pest damage with a higher amount of loss. Therefore, the vice president suggested returning to the choice of original pest control services for storage warehouses. However, vice president can not justify his points as he missed serveral factors contributing to the seemingly comparatively serever loss in Wintervale.
The food distribution company switched to Fly-Away Pest Control Company just recently, and claimed the damage in Wintervale warehouse was discovered about a month ago. It is possible that Fly-Away Pest Control has not started working on the pest control because any company that take over a new business needs to design a plan before setoff. Even if Fly-Away Pest Control has started by the time the damage was found, the severe pest issue was not likely to develop so fast in merely a month. The pest problem must has been overlooked when the Buzzoff Pest Control Company was still in charge of the warehouse.
Moreover, the memo compared the loss in Wintervale with the damage in Wintervale, and concluded the warehouse handled by the Buzzoff Pest Control suffered less damage. Although 10000 was indeed less than the damage of 20000 worth of food, the statement did not provide any information of the value of food stored in each warehouse, nor did it reveal the size, the structure, the extent of weariness of each warehouse. If the amount of food stored in Winterhouse was less than in Palm city but most of the storage was contaminated by the pest, while only a small part of food was damaged in Palm city, how could the vice prisident insist on more effective work from the Buzzoff Pest Control? And considering the structure of the warehouse, it is possible that the warehouse in Palm city is wooden structure which has been dampened due to years of moisture. Then it is unfair to require the same quality of pest control given the equal expenditure.
It is also to hasty to conclude Buzzoff would give the food distribution company the most cost-effective
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1745 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.929 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.629 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.947 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.421 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.163 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 305, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
Suggestion: need
...y company that take over a new business needs to design a plan before setoff. Even if...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01694915254 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69965471741 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491525423729 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2831038476 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.615384615 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438386833114 0.218282227539 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171952243211 0.0743258471296 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1032937642 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2624787054 0.128457276422 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0966997409779 0.0628817314937 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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