The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author suggests that Quiot Manufacturing should shorten each of their three work shifts by one hour to increase the productivity of their employees. However, several assumptions in the article need to be addressed.
The author assumes that the work shifts of Panoply Industries plant are one hour shorter than theirs. However, it was possible that Quiot Manufacturing was an world-class company, and its clients were many big-scale enterprises, such as TSMC or Nvidia, which were top-notch semiconductor companies. In order to meet these companies’ needs, this company would have more tasks to be addressed than Panoply Industries. Nevertheless, Panoply Industries only had to deal with less workloads, so the employees of Panoply Industries did not have to work for a longer hours. Moreover, it was also likely that these two companies were same scale, however, Panoply Industries hired more employees to word at assemble lines, so the employees of Panoply Industries could have less working hours than Quiot Manufacturing. Therefore, the author has to provide more information about these two companies.
The author assumes that these experts have superior ability to analyze the factors of these accidents . However, it is possible that these experts’ opinions are unreliable. For example, if these experts have doctoral degrees, we may somewhat believe their opinions. However, if these experts only have bachelor’s degrees, then we could not totally trust on their opinion. Moreover, these did not provide some more reliable reports to prove their ideas. If they can answer how much percentage of employees have these two problems of fatigue and sleep deprivation, we may be able to trust on their opinions. Furthermore, it is also possible that there may be more employees having health problems than Panoply Industries, so the percentage of on-the-job accidents of Quiot Manufacturing is higher than Panoply Industries. Therefore, the author has to tell us if these experts’ opinions are reliable.
The author assumes that if they shorten each of their three work shifts by one hour, the productivity of their employees can be increased. However, it is possible that if the employees can get one more hour to use, they may choose to play video games instead of sleep. Because these employees always have to deal with lots of tough issues when they worked, if they have more spare time to utilize, it is highly possible that they will use this extra time to refresh themselves, such as playing computer games or seeing a movie. As a result, the author has to ensure that if their employees can obtain more free time, they will decide to sleep more instead of doing other leisure activities.
Shortening each of their three work shifts by one hour may somewhat increase the productivity of their employees. However, the author has to address the assumptions mentioned above to strengthen the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2380 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.075 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.616 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.037 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...s possible that Quiot Manufacturing was an world-class company, and its clients we...
^^
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workloads is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...anoply Industries only had to deal with less workloads, so the employees of Panoply ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...o analyze the factors of these accidents . However, it is possible that these expe...
^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: ''.
...ns. However, if these experts only have bachelor’s degrees, then we could not totally tr...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 28.8173652695 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2473347548 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78514214173 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439232409382 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5365210946 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.863636364 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204971877326 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708215087445 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874642848502 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1258331196 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739869183102 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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