The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a local newspaper:
“It makes no sense that in most places 15-year-olds are not eligible for their driver’s license while people who are far
older can retain all of their driving privileges by simply renewing their license. If older drivers can get these renewals,
often without having to pass another driving test, then 15-year-olds should be eligible to get a license. Fifteen-yearolds
typically have much better eyesight, especially at night; much better hand-eye coordination; and much quicker
reflexes. They are also less likely to feel confused by unexpected developments or disoriented in unfamiliar
surroundings, and they recover from injuries more quickly.”
The argument states that whereas older people can retain all of their driving privileges by simply renewing their licence, it is unfair that in most places 15-year-olds are not eligible eligible to obtain their driver's licence. Though the argument is compelling on face value, its conclusion is ultimately untenable because it rests on faulty assumptions. Moreover, the argument lacks information on several important factors on the basis of which it can be properly evaluated.
First of all, the argument improperly compares allowing older people to be eligible for renewals to 15 year olds being eligible to getting a drivers licence. There is no relation between these two. The argument would hold better if the author compares older people who are applying for a driver’s license for the first time with 15-year-olds.
Secondly, the argument readily assumes that 15-year-olds have the maturity that is required to safely operate a vehicle on public roads. One of the most important factors in determining one’s eligibility to get a driver’s license is how cautious he/she is while driving a motor vehicle. The modern day automobiles are powerful machines that can cause considerable damage to life and property. Since young people are especially prone to taking rash decisions, this faulty assumption weakens the conclusion.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed based on the above mentioned reasons. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly provides pertinent information. In order to properly assess the merits of a certain decision, it is important to have full knowledge of all the contributing factors. In this particular case, it would be helpful to know if 15-year-olds are as safe as older people when operating a vehicle and if there are any other reasons such as their ability to take mature decisions in life threatening situations and whether they are prone to be influenced by others with bad intent. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debate.
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- Some People Say That It Is Important To Keep Home And Workplace Tidy | Band 9 IELTS Essay Sample 56
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1672 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.193 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.856 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.224 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: eligible
...hat in most places 15-year-olds are not eligible eligible to obtain their drivers licence. Though...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...newals to 15 year olds being eligible to getting a drivers licence. There is no r...
^^
Line 9, column 361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...les are powerful machines that can cause considerable damage to life and property...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38940809969 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99185463966 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570093457944 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1070759969 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.333333333 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317571917712 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866272909088 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10685385494 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196294526579 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815628802255 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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