The following appeared in a popular health and fitness magazine.
" A ten- year study of a group of 552 men from Elysia showed that long-term consumption of caffeinated black tea was associated with a much lower risk of stroke. Of these men, those who drank more than three cups of black tea a day had a 70 percent lower risk of stroke than those who drank no tea. These results suggest that health-conscious people should consume at least three cups of black tea a day, beginning early in life.
I got from the article which is published in a popular health and fitness magazine that bsed on the experimnet which had been done on the 552 men. Suggest that if you pay attention to your helth, you’d bette to drink at least three cups od black tea during a day. The author states that every one can reduce their risk of stroke just by drinking three kinds of black tea. In my point of view this argument have some weaknesses in some grounds and I think that the author view does not hold water.
First, making an experiment during 10 years just on the 552 man can not give a convincing result because your nemurical group for making experiment were to show. Moreover, the author don’t mentiones to the age range and their living position before, during and afeter the experiment. which can make a huge difference on the level of the rosk of the stroke.
Second, this article not mention to the other part of selection group diet. Maybe any sort of the nurtiens was accessiable during those years which is good to lowering the stroke and this option was the cause of the differences which is mentioned in the article. On the other hand, there is no metion to the airpolution ot other polutions and society stability on the article which is the main cause of the strokes. In other word, any other changes may be occure during those years to cuase the differense in the selective group.
Last, the article don’t stated the social level of the selective group and the pressure of their work or the hours that they have to work during a day. All of us knows that different work possitions, kinds, working hours And their salary levels had their own effect on the humans health. in other work, they may used to live in a good position.
In sum, I fund the argument unconvincing because of the lack of the information about the group menber which experiment was done on them and because they choose a small group to make experiment during the ten years and lack of the informayion about the weather and finantioal stability of the members. Therefore, I think that health and fitness magazin should have made a expantion experiment before make any asserttion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: I got from the article which is published in a popular health and fitness magazine that bsed on the experimnet which had been done on the 552 men.
Error: bsed Suggestion: bed
Error: experimnet Suggestion: experiment
Sentence: Suggest that if you pay attention to your helth, you'd bette to drink at least three cups od black tea during a day.
Error: helth Suggestion: health
Error: od Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: bette Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: First, making an experiment during 10 years just on the 552 man can not give a convincing result because your nemurical group for making experiment were to show.
Error: nemurical Suggestion: memorial
Sentence: Moreover, the author don't mentiones to the age range and their living position before, during and afeter the experiment. which can make a huge difference on the level of the rosk of the stroke.
Error: afeter Suggestion: after
Error: mentiones Suggestion: mentions
Error: rosk Suggestion: rock
Sentence: Maybe any sort of the nurtiens was accessiable during those years which is good to lowering the stroke and this option was the cause of the differences which is mentioned in the article.
Error: accessiable Suggestion: accessible
Error: nurtiens Suggestion: nations
Sentence: On the other hand, there is no metion to the airpolution ot other polutions and society stability on the article which is the main cause of the strokes.
Error: ot Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: airpolution Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: polutions Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: metion Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In other word, any other changes may be occure during those years to cuase the differense in the selective group.
Error: cuase Suggestion: case
Error: differense Suggestion: difference
Error: occure Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: All of us knows that different work possitions, kinds, working hours And their salary levels had their own effect on the humans health. in other work, they may used to live in a good position.
Error: possitions Suggestion: positions
Sentence: In sum, I fund the argument unconvincing because of the lack of the information about the group menber which experiment was done on them and because they choose a small group to make experiment during the ten years and lack of the informayion about the weather and finantioal stability of the members.
Error: informayion Suggestion: information
Error: menber Suggestion: member
Error: finantioal Suggestion: financial
Sentence: Therefore, I think that health and fitness magazin should have made a expantion experiment before make any asserttion.
Error: asserttion Suggestion: assertion
Error: expantion Suggestion: expansion
Error: magazin Suggestion: magazine
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 24 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1737 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.477 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.324 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.207 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...fore, during and afeter the experiment. which can make a huge difference on the level...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...fore, during and afeter the experiment. which can make a huge difference on the level...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 339, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on to the airpolution ot other polutions and society stability on the article whi...
^^
Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...lary levels had their own effect on the humans health. in other work, they may used to...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
... their own effect on the humans health. in other work, they may used to live in a ...
^^
Line 6, column 370, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...th and fitness magazin should have made a expantion experiment before make any as...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, at least, i think, sort of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65454545455 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41445302369 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498701298701 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4734740493 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163396815543 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051232500486 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426045257436 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749004225424 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554678439008 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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