The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a ten-year budget for the city of Calatrava.
"The birthrate in our city is declining: in fact, last year's birthrate was only one-half that of five years ago. Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically, and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted for education during the next decade. At the same time, we can reduce funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities. As a result, we will have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults, since we can expect the adult population of the city to increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
This editorial assumes that because lower newborn in the future, the city of Calatrava will save more money in the education and recreation facilities. And then, this saved money could be used to facilitate new programs used primarily by adults. Nevertheless, there are some evidences should be offered in order to evaluate the recommendation.
To begin with, one problem with the argument is that it assumes the lower birthrate apply equally to the low number of students. Yet, this may not be the case, for a variety of possible reasons. Perhaps there are still more than one hundred million infant born in the city of Calatrava. So a piece of evidence that we would need in order to evaluate the reasoning behind it is information about how many infant born in the city of Calatrava. Without ruling out such possibility, the author cannot justifiably conclude that the number of students is small in the city of Calatrava.
Even though the number of students is small in the city of Calatrava, we still need another evidence to evaluate a reasonable recommendation. The editor’s recommendation depends on the assumption that they can reduce the funds budged for education in the city of Calatrava because of low number of students. However, a myriad of other factors, including increasing birthrate after two years, or extra added students, might undermine the recommendation. To be specific, maybe economic recovery will cause the number of infant increasing, or the extra added students because of excessive migration family. Without ruling out these and other possible causes, the editor cannot justifiably conclude that they can safely reduce the funds budged for education in the city of Calatrava.
Further, the author’s conclusion that they will have more extra money to facilitate programs used by adults is unwarranted. There is lacking a crucial evidence to support the conclusion; Maybe saved money is too low to force new programs. It is entirely possible that the amount of money a new program need will offset, even outweigh the revenue. Besides, a myriad of other unexpected occurrences, such as unfavorable economic depression, might prevent plans from being as available as the argument predicts.
In sum, the committee must offer the specific evidences to support the conclusion. First of all, how many of infant now must be offered. Secondly, the extra evidence that can preclude some other factors, such as increasing birthrate after two years or extra added students, is needed. Finally, the evidence that predict accurate saved money and programs expense must be provided.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2126 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.672 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.09 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, such as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22857142857 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82147980665 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452380952381 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7175139697 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165720875095 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487272192914 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457017477449 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882286583897 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064543305875 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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