The following appeared in a recommendation from the president of Amburg's Chamber of Commerce.
"Last October the city of Belleville installed high-intensity lighting in its central business district, and vandalism there declined within a month. The city of Amburg has recently begun police patrols on bicycles in its business district, but the rate of vandalism there remains constant. We should install high-intensity lighting throughout Amburg, then, because doing so is a more effective way to combat crime. By reducing crime in this way, we can revitalize the declining neighborhoods in our city."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Regarding the issue, a recommendation given by the president of the Amburgs Chamber of Commerce in the article that the author of the argument installed high-intensity lighting in his central business district in the city of Belleville in the month of October and police patrolling started in the city of Amburg for protection of business due to increase in crime. Installing lighting throughout the city of Amburg may deteriorate the vandalism. Using this technique we will revitalize neighbors in the city back. The recommendation given by the president is based on insufficient data and information which assumes to be the relation of increase in crime among both cities one with high-intensity lighting installation but for Amburg city seems to be another reason for a crime that doesn't have to validate evidence to prove it. This recommendation rests on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions and is, therefore, unpersuasive as it stands. However, the argument is not well supported and flawed. In order to ascertain the degree to which this correlation is true, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, are the two areas where reported vandalism the same? It might be possible that initially there was a decline in vandalism but after some time vandals have grown accustomed to the lighting and are no longer deterred by it. But the article does not mention the type of crime in Belleville city; maybe the crime was the usage of the drug. As a result, by installing the light, they demolish this situation for the addicts. However, there is no lucid evidence about this issue. In this instance, the argument for installation would be weakened simply because there is no relation that the president is trying to convince the proportionality with an increase in vandalism. There is no sufficient data to verify the stated assumption to hold it true.
Secondly, what are the costs of installing these lights in comparison to the bicycle patrols, and would they be cost-effective? Furthermore, there might be some other factors like a demographic shift or worsening economic conditions that have served to increase vandalism. Maintenance should be provided for receipts and long-term costs for effective inference. Yet, the argument of the president would not hold much water. Hence, the other conditions should be highlighted for incidences to strengthen his statement.
Further as per the president, reducing crime would result in a revitalization of city neighborhoods is unwarranted. The decline in neighborhoods due to the availability of cheaper and attractive housing in the suburbs city. It is merely a vague expectation about the future without cogent and concrete evidence to adherence its feasibility. In all likelihood, there are a myriad of other choices such as social programs and juvenile legal-system reforms. Therefore, the assumption and expectation should shape based on the logical clue of this decrease and the valid method to flourish it.
In conclusion, to persuade me that installing a lighting system will be effective in Ambrug city, the writer must supply clear evidence that the crime types of the two cities are similar. Providing stronger evidence than the correlation that is presented here would carry more weight into the need to install these lights. He must also provide a clue that police patrols cannot address this problem solo. Hence, it can be said that the recommendations of the president are not well supported. As it stands, however, the argument is flawed for the reason indicated.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 569 350
No. of Characters: 2909 1500
No. of Different Words: 266 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.884 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.112 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.995 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 209 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 168 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 132 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 86 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.621 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.722 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.655 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.235 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.429 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 785, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s to be another reason for a crime that doesnt have to validate evidence to prove it. ...
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Line 3, column 749, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'trues'?
Suggestion: trues
...verify the stated assumption to hold it true. Secondly, what are the costs of ins...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...idences to strengthen his statement. Further as per the president, reducing crime wo...
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Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...ibility. In all likelihood, there are a myriad of other choices such as social program...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2982.0 2260.96107784 132% => OK
No of words: 568.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05230107571 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 204.123752495 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477112676056 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 945.9 705.55239521 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 69.8628689065 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.827586207 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5862068966 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.37931034483 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263306898383 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588195677773 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944087762414 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134125815366 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125844286011 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 98.500998004 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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