The following is an excerpt from a letter sent by the principal of Greenwood School to the parents of all incoming kindergarteners. "We have decided to institute a policy of all-day kindergarten, instead of half-day kindergarten, for all students at Green

The principal concludes that the time wasted at home or in daycare will be reduced with the introduction of all-day kindergarten. The principal has nowhere mentioned if this new system has been tested or being implemented somewhere else with positive results. Without proof, it cannot be claimed that the time will be better utilized at the school.

First of all, the assumption that the kids will not waste time at school is wrong, the kindergartners are in the age group of 5-6 years, they are too young to understand the importance of time. Spending a full day at school instead of half a day will hit the kids hard. The kindergartners are just starting school, they are not used to being away from their family for such periods of time. This can cause the kids to be moody and not pay attention to teachers. Also, their attention spans are relatively very less compared to students who attend school full day, this makes the students likely to lash out when being forced to take in more than what they can digest in a single day. All this would lead to equal if no more wastage of time. Instead of keeping an all-day kindergarten, the school can increase the time spent at school gradually as the capacity of the kids’ increase. This would make the transition much easier for both the school and kids.

Secondly, separating the so-called average students from others will make them feel left out. This can lead to a bigger divide moving forward, which can further lead to one side bullying the other and we all know how bad that can get. So, it will not be wise to create a division between students. Instead, use the regular distribution of students in the class, that method has a proven record as to not create such scenarios.

Lastly, how can the school authorities judge a kid’s performance level at such a young age? Imagine if they determine that a bunch of kids as high performing and they turn out to be the opposite. All the low-achieving kids will then be put together, that class will then suffer as they do not have the high-achieving kids to help them out as planned earlier, even if they are judged correctly what is to say that the kids will help out each other. What if they just make fun of the less accomplished ones? This will further decrease their confidence in themselves, which will only increase the problems.

Hence, I would like to conclude that this argument has many flaws if it is implemented it will most probably fail. To improve this argument, I would suggest implementing the alternatives I have mentioned earlier. The corrected argument shall be to increase the time spent at school gradually and the division of classes to be conventional, with these modifications, the plan is less likely to fail.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, as to, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.9520958084 193% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 482.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72821576763 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63875050975 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491701244813 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1286601289 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0869565217 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9565217391 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65217391304 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201921881715 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675330241963 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804988148284 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112031792882 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0849392525567 0.0628817314937 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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