The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
The conclusion which is provided by the business manager that the little change instead of using their significant style is the only impact on their customer doesn't strengthen with the given arguments and have many loopholes. The manager have to give relevant assumptions to reach to a specific conclusion. Below are the illustrations to bolster the assumptions.
Primarily, the manager mentioned that they have replaced the butter by margarine in restaurants in the southwestern united states and come to a conclusion that 2 percent of customers reduction. To come to a conclusion the manager needs to give more records from the other places of their food chains because maybe in other places also there will be a reduction in the customers.
Secondly, the manager is not clear about their customer feedbacks, because they only given an assumption that the customer cannot distinguish between that butter and the margarine. So if the customers are not able to find the difference between the change which they have done, then how the manager come to an conclusion that the 2 percentage of loss is based on the change in the butter.
Lastly, the manager have to provide more information about the impact of the customer, because reduction of the customer and complains are not depend on the one factor. They have to do a proper research while come to an conclusion and give more information that what else they have changed and compare with different range of data set and more people to get a relevant details of the impact on the customer.
In sum, I would like concur that the aforementioned illustration proofs that the business manager have to give more relevant information about the conclusion. Thus, the assumptions which is provided here is flawed and the business manager needs to check before come to any conclusion.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1500 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.902 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.723 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.495 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.444 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.72 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...le is the only impact on their customer doesnt strengthen with the given arguments and...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 308, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...have done, then how the manager come to an conclusion that the 2 percentage of los...
^^
Line 13, column 144, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...n of the customer and complains are not depend on the one factor. They have to do a pr...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 186, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'proper research'.
Suggestion: proper research
...pend on the one factor. They have to do a proper research while come to an conclusion and give mo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 218, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e to do a proper research while come to an conclusion and give more information th...
^^
Line 13, column 370, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'detail'?
Suggestion: detail
...a set and more people to get a relevant details of the impact on the customer. In...
^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...etails of the impact on the customer. In sum, I would like concur that the afo...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 305.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06885245902 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79453915214 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445901639344 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8101154928 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.545454545 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0867474117746 0.218282227539 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426626967678 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444019311963 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577042297699 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380077544863 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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