The following is part of a business plan being discussed at a board meeting of the Perks Company:
"It is no longer cost-effective for the Perks Company to continue offering its employees a generous package of benefits and incentives year after year. In periods when national unemployment rates are low, Perks may need to offer such a package in order to attract and keep good employees, but since national unemployment rates are now high, Perks does not need to offer the same benefits and incentives. The money thus saved could be better used to replace the existing plant machinery with more technologically sophisticated equipment, or even to build an additional plant."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
The author concludes that the perk company needs to reduce the generous package of benefits and incentives, and should invest its money in reinvigorating existing plant machinery or in installing additional plant. The author gives the following reason to support his suggestion: In the particular period of high unemployment rate, the company does not need to redirect benefits package and incentives to attract and retain employees. Th author's reasoning is flawed for several reasons.
First, In analysis of the argument, The author a oversimplified the situation. The author recommends reducing the benefits and incentives in future. The author fails to account that because of these incentives and packages the company maintains its productivity level. For example, the United airlines, an internal American airlines, keeps supplying additional benefits and incentives to employees including gate agents even. these extra perks help in maintaining on-time departure and on-time arrival,and other performances goals.Consequently, In last 10 months, The airlines twice topped the list of best service providers.
Second, the author suggests that the company invest in new technology and in the set up of new plant. The author fails to consider that a new technology needs a skilled employees who, in turn, may ask for high incentives and additional packages and require additional training.Therefore, this course of action may unnecessarily increase the cost of product.For instance, Texla, a new manufacturer of battery cars,employed highly skilled employees and provided the intense training base to bring new product in market. Consequently,this strategy has increased the production cost and, in return, the cost of product in market.
Finally, the author does not lend a strong support for his actions. It may be possible that incentives provided by the company to labor pool are "one time incentives" knowns "variable pay". For example, Since the last decade. companies are offering variable pay instead of fixed pay to keep its employees. this course of action amounts only 12.2% of total compensation budget while fixed pay known as "increment in package" amounts 30% of total compensation budget.
In conclusion, the author's strategy was not persuasive. The author's assumption cut in incentives and invest in technology needs a strong support to be more effective.He needs to come up with the plan that must maintain the productivity level along with cost effectiveness.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
external examples are not recommended to support the arguments.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 2047 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.303 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.848 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.723 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 48, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...In analysis of the argument, The author a oversimplified the situation. The autho...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ds reducing the benefits and incentives in future. The author fails to account that becau...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'airline'?
Suggestion: airline
...e United airlines, an internal American airlines, keeps supplying additional benefits an...
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Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...o employees including gate agents even. these extra perks help in maintaining on-time...
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Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...ng on-time departure and on-time arrival,and other performances goals.Consequently, ...
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Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Consequently
...me arrival,and other performances goals.Consequently, In last 10 months, The airlines twice ...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'employee'?
Suggestion: employee
...r that a new technology needs a skilled employees who, in turn, may ask for high incentiv...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...ackages and require additional training.Therefore, this course of action may unnecessaril...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...ecessarily increase the cost of product.For instance, Texla, a new manufacturer of ...
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Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , employed
...exla, a new manufacturer of battery cars,employed highly skilled employees and provided t...
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Line 5, column 531, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...ring new product in market. Consequently,this strategy has increased the production c...
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Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Companies
...s;. For example, Since the last decade. companies are offering variable pay instead of fi...
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Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ead of fixed pay to keep its employees. this course of action amounts only 12.2% of ...
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Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ensation budget. In conclusion, the authors strategy was not persuasive. The author...
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Line 9, column 61, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...uthors strategy was not persuasive. The authors assumption cut in incentives and invest...
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Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...s a strong support to be more effective.He needs to come up with the plan that mus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66226912929 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2744945655 2.78398813304 118% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527704485488 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.6454780142 57.8364921388 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.222222222 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192437017329 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603253491375 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438984258478 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106907527702 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040060276309 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.