The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
The author here talks about the reccomendation of opening a cafe at Monarch book store passed by Board of Directors of Monarch Books. The recoomendation is made based on thevarious factors, before going to the comclusion author needs to answere few question, firstly whether Monarch Books customers are interested in drinking cooffee at Monarch Books? Secondly, doues the area reflect with the same age group percentage as of national's? Thirdly, regarding the past popularity and effect of opening a cafe by Regal Books.
The author talk here about the popularity of the Monarch Books which is been serving in the same location from past tewnty years having a large customer base. Monarch Books is known for its wide selection if books on all the subject. Decision of opening a cafe withig the Monarch books store as the cafe needs to be taken agter understanding the interest of their customers. Reason for popilarity of the Monarch Books among the readers might be due to the peaceful atmosphere within the store. Opening a cafe will surely effcet these atmosphere as it will be too noisy and that might affect the interest of thir customer. In contrast if people like to enjoy thier books over a cup if coffee, this would support the argument of opening the cafe.
Here author has also stated about converting the children's books are to the cafe, stating that the children book will soon be becoming less popular. These assumptions is made based on the indication made by recent national regarding a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. The author here needs to understand the population percentage within its location as there might be a possibility that the area would not reflect the nationl's trend. Going forward with the dicision would affect in decreasing the number of customers below age group 10.
The thrid arguent stated by the author that the cafe will help in attracting more customers and better compete with Regal Book which has recently opened its own cafe. Here the author has failed to explain whether the opening on cafe by Regal Books has increased the popularity and number of customers. There might be case where Regal Books may also have large number of customers irrespective of the cafe opening due to its past advertising and collection of the books.
The author needs to have some close analysis on different aspect like thier customer interest, age group percentage within the serving location and analysis of the impact of cafe openend by Regal Books before calling on the decision of opening a cafe at Monarch Books.
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- The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books."We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because 59
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author here talks about the reccomendation of opening a cafe at Monarch book store passed by Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
Error: reccomendation Suggestion: recommendation
Sentence: The recoomendation is made based on thevarious factors, before going to the comclusion author needs to answere few question, firstly whether Monarch Books customers are interested in drinking cooffee at Monarch Books?
Error: thevarious Suggestion: theories
Error: cooffee Suggestion: coffee
Error: comclusion Suggestion: conclusion
Error: recoomendation Suggestion: recommendation
Error: answere Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The author talk here about the popularity of the Monarch Books which is been serving in the same location from past tewnty years having a large customer base.
Error: tewnty Suggestion: twenty
Sentence: Decision of opening a cafe withig the Monarch books store as the cafe needs to be taken agter understanding the interest of their customers.
Error: agter Suggestion: after
Error: withig Suggestion: within
Sentence: Reason for popilarity of the Monarch Books among the readers might be due to the peaceful atmosphere within the store.
Error: popilarity Suggestion: popularity
Sentence: Opening a cafe will surely effcet these atmosphere as it will be too noisy and that might affect the interest of thir customer.
Error: effcet Suggestion: effect
Error: thir Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In contrast if people like to enjoy thier books over a cup if coffee, this would support the argument of opening the cafe.
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Going forward with the dicision would affect in decreasing the number of customers below age group 10.
Error: dicision Suggestion: division
Sentence: The thrid arguent stated by the author that the cafe will help in attracting more customers and better compete with Regal Book which has recently opened its own cafe.
Error: thrid Suggestion: third
Error: arguent Suggestion: argument
Sentence: The author needs to have some close analysis on different aspect like thier customer interest, age group percentage within the serving location and analysis of the impact of cafe openend by Regal Books before calling on the decision of opening a cafe at Monarch Books.
Error: openend Suggestion: opened
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
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flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 19 2
Double check spelling errors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 19 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 435 350
No. of Characters: 2123 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.567 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.88 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.517 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.526 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun question seems to be countable; consider using: 'few questions'.
Suggestion: few questions
... the comclusion author needs to answere few question, firstly whether Monarch Books customer...
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Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this atmosphere' or 'these atmospheres'?
Suggestion: this atmosphere; these atmospheres
...tore. Opening a cafe will surely effcet these atmosphere as it will be too noisy and that might ...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...ffect the interest of thir customer. In contrast if people like to enjoy thier books ove...
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Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...ecoming less popular. These assumptions is made based on the indication made by re...
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Line 5, column 511, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
.... Going forward with the dicision would affect in decreasing the number of customers belo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9724137931 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54067193324 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429885057471 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0289763808 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.166666667 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293818508965 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112600791824 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936839540933 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188994399716 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950015557115 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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