The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The president of the Grove College suggests that remaining all-female strategy will improve morale among pupils and easier to persistently get financial aid from alumnae. Still, the argument is rife with skewed assumptions that the author has to address.
Firstly, the writer says that he or she wants to stay all-female status because 80 percent of the students want to remain all female and half of the alumnae oppose the male application policy. Nevertheless, the assumption here is that the questionnaire is enough representative. It is possible that the content of the questionnaire is not fully-representative at all. For example, it only samples 10% of the students in Grove College and even 80% of 10% of students are against the male application, it is barely to reflect the mind of the major people. Maybe most of the pupils agree with the male admission policy instead. Thus, the writer has to consider the assumption and it is suggested to use a 3rd-party survey institution for double-checking.
Besides, the writer claims that not compelling to the opinion of alumnae would lose financial aid from them and reduce the income. The assumption here is that the alumnae offer much more money than it is from male students. However, the income from male pupils could be much higher than the financial aid from alumnae. For instance, the financial contribution of alumnae occupies only 10% of the income of Grove College, yet the beneficial gain from male students could make the whole income double. As a result, the school will become richer after admitting male students to Grove College rather than poor. The president needs to handle with the assumption to make the argument more cogent.
Additionally, the president proposes that the importance of the survey outdoes the opinion from faculty members. The assumption here is that the survey results are more wise and correct for the admission decision than those from faculties. Still, it is possible that the faculties member with professional financial from world-class institutions and they already have deep studies in the related policy for more than ten years. Furthermore, their reputation of the top-ranking journal has to be reckoned with. Thus, the opinion from these experts is more valuable than the survey results from students. The author is suggested to consider the assumption and to provide the credential background of their faculties.
In conclusion, readers could not believe the argument unless the president could cope with the assumptions mentioned above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 409 350
No. of Characters: 2088 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.497 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.105 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.476 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.926 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.34 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'faculties'' or 'faculty's'?
Suggestion: faculties'; faculty's
...culties. Still, it is possible that the faculties member with professional financial from...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, still, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22493887531 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88099249668 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459657701711 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8798952995 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.761904762 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04761904762 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105848576997 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326064862538 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502562899519 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0707769543797 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499412885298 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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