"In a laboratory study of liquid antibacterial hand soaps, a concentrated solution of UltraClean produced a 40 percent greater reduction in the bacteria population than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals. During a subsequent te

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"In a laboratory study of liquid antibacterial hand soaps, a concentrated solution of UltraClean produced a 40 percent greater reduction in the bacteria population than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals. During a subsequent test of UltraClean at our hospital in Work by, that hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection than did any of the other hospitals in our group. Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply ultraClean at all hand-washing stations throughout our hospital system."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument

The argument suggests that we should use UltraClean rather than liquid hand soaps because fewer patient infection and more bacteria reduction. some musing over evidence before taking any steps is first very much in order.

The author suggests that UItraClean could produce more bacterial reduction than conventional liquid hand soaps on the based of the laboratory studying. however, some of credentials of the background of the laboratory and testing methodologies should be presented before we trust the laboratory results. if the laboratory is a famous and authoritative institution having many successful experiences in hygienic studying, there are a lots of professors and experts making plenty of credible publications, then we could trust the report. On the contrary, if the laboratory is one of the company department and that company sells UltraClean, then we are not sure if there is any inclination or bias in the studying. For example, if the company wants to sell the <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>machine, their testing content could be designed as like following: Separating two groups of people, first group of people using traditional liquid soaps wash their hand only in 10 seconds, on the other side, the other group clean their hand with <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>with 20 seconds. Therefore, we could expect that <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>eradicate more bacteria than soaps due to longer cleaning time. The author has to offer the detail background and the validity of the laboratory studying results to strengthen the argument.

Even if the studying report is impartial, authoritative and credible, it still lacks of evidence to convince <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>could be useful in the hospital. The argument seems to imply that the better results in the laboratory proves that also works well in the hospital, however the connection is unclear. if all workers and patients in the hospitals follow the same procedure to use <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>as experts did in the laboratory, they’re sure to gain approximate results. however, it could be different story if they use <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>in improper way in the hospital, then the effectiveness is unknown. For instance, patients who don’t know how to use or operate <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span> do not follow the guideline of <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>, they really do not clean their hand actually because they just apply water instead of the essential cleaning liquid or medicine. thus, under such condition, the performance of <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>could be worse than soaps. The author has to provide the essential information about the usage of hospitals and laboratory to make the argument cogent.

Additionally, the arguments claims that fewer cases of patient infection than other hospitals during the test of <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>. some details of credentials about comparison is unclear. The statement could be true, because other hospitals have the identical scale, departments and environments, before the testing, the infection rate of testing group and placebo groups are the same every year, the comparison results would be meaningful. Nevertheless, if the comparison groups is located in the hot area and nearby the garbage factory, they could have higher infection rate than the hospital tested with <span style="font-size: 19.36px;">UltraClean </span>because higher temperature and dirty environment make bacterial proliferating and flourishing. thus, the author is necessary to provide the counterpart evidence to fortify the arguments.

In conclusion, the author needs to provide more details of evidence mentioned above to make the argument more persuasive and convincing.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, nevertheless, really, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3512.0 2260.96107784 155% => OK
No of words: 570.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16140350877 5.12650576532 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.54989641665 2.78398813304 163% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457894736842 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1027.8 705.55239521 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.3174682982 57.8364921388 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.636363636 119.503703932 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 5.70786347227 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127069303461 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539404116352 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629300030726 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877050756374 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676936163832 0.0628817314937 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 14.3799401198 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.3550499002 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.74 12.5979740519 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 98.500998004 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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