"The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The given argument is about the viewership of the Super screen produced movies.It states that fewer people attended the superscreen produced movies last year than in any other year.It further states that the positive reviews received by certain specific superscreen movies actually increased during the past year.Further it concludes that the reviews are not reaching its audience and hence asks to allocate a greater share of its budget to advertising in order to reach its audience.The given argument has a number of logical fallacies and unexplained assumptions.The fallacies along with the lack of evidence cause the arguent to fail dramatically.
Firstly ,it states that the percentage of positive reviews about specific superscreen movies increased during the past year.Therein lies that first fallacy.The argument assumes that all the reviews are actually reliable and show the proper picture.Maybe the audience gave positive reviews but did not actually like the movie.Maybe the people whose reviews were taken hold unorthodox opinions and represent a small portion of the movie-goers and do not show the complete picture.Also the argument states that only specific movies got positive reviews.So it is possible that the production produced 1 or 2 good movies which received good reviews but rest of the movies were not upto the standard.By providing more evidence to prove the authenticty of these reviews and by getting rid of the assumption on which the reviews are based ,the argument can be made stronger.
Secondly,it states that the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of the prospective viewers.However is this a huge assumption with both cause and effect being assumptions.The argument nowhere provides evidence to support the claim that the reviews are not reaching its prospective viewers.Thus the cause of the argument is an assumption. Similarly, even if the good reviews reach the viewers it does not mean that they will go to watch the movie.Most of the people may not rely upon such reviews to decide whether they go for a movie.By providing more evidence to prove that the reviews are not reaching the prospective viewers and that if the reviews reach the viewers the people will go to watch the movies,this argumet can be made stronger.
Finally the argument concludes that the problem is not with the quality of the movies but with the lack of awareness and hence call for increased share of budget for advertsing next year.The entire conclusion is one big assumption that does not have any evidence to support its claim.The argument nowhere cites evidence to prove that there is no awareness of the reviwes of the movie.Maybe the people are aware of the reviwes but do not care about the reviews.Also there is no evidence to prove that the quality of movies is actually good and even if it is good,it does not mean it will attract viewers.Hence the claim that for allocating more budget for advertising is based on faulty reasoning.There is no evidence to prove that more advertising will lead to more people wanting to watch the Super scrren produced movies.By providing evidence to support the claim that the people lack awarenes of the good quality movies and by proving that increased advertsing will lead to increased people watching the movies,the argument can be made stronger.
Thus the argument is based on a number of assumption and has a number of logical fallacies.The assumption that the positive reviwes are authentic,the assumption taht people lack awareness of good movies ,the assumption that the problem is not with the quality coupled with the faulty claim that increased advertising will lead to increased number of movie viewers,render the argument feckless.By providing more evidence to support its claims and by getting rid of the fallacies ,the argument can be made stronger.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: argument has a number of logical fallacies and unexplained assumptions.The fallacies along with the lack of evidence cause the arguent to fail dramatically.
Error: arguent Suggestion: argument
Sentence: states that only specific movies got positive reviews.So it is possible that the production produced 1 or 2 good movies which received good reviews but rest of the movies were not upto the standard.By providing more evidence to prove the authenticty of these reviews and by getting rid of the assumption on which the reviews are based ,the argument can be made stronger.
Error: authenticty Suggestion: authenticity
Error: upto Suggestion: unto
Sentence: Similarly, even if the good reviews reach the viewers it does not mean that they will go to watch the movie.Most of the people may not rely upon such reviews to decide whether they go for a movie.By providing more evidence to prove that the reviews are not reaching the prospective viewers and that if the reviews reach the viewers the people will go to watch the movies,this argumet can be made stronger.
Error: argumet Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Finally the argument concludes that the problem is not with the quality of the movies but with the lack of awareness and hence call for increased share of budget for advertsing next year.The entire conclusion is one big assumption that does not have any evidence to support its claim.The argument nowhere cites evidence to prove that there is no awareness of the reviwes of the movie.Maybe the people are aware of the reviwes but do not care about the reviews.Also there is no evidence to prove that
Error: advertsing Suggestion: advertising
Error: reviwes Suggestion: reviews
Sentence: the quality of movies is actually good and even if it is good,it does not mean it will attract viewers.Hence the claim that for allocating more budget for advertising is based on faulty reasoning.There is no evidence to prove that more advertising will lead to more people wanting to watch the Super scrren produced movies.By providing evidence to support the claim that the people lack awarenes of the good quality movies and by proving that increased advertsing will lead to increased people
Error: scrren Suggestion: screen
Error: advertsing Suggestion: advertising
Error: awarenes Suggestion: awareness
Sentence: Thus the argument is based on a number of assumption and has a number of logical fallacies.The assumption that the positive reviwes are authentic,the assumption taht people lack awareness of good movies ,the assumption that the problem is not with the quality coupled with the faulty claim that increased advertising will lead to increased number of movie viewers,render the argument feckless.By providing more evidence to support its claims and by getting rid of the fallacies ,the argument can be
Error: taht Suggestion: tact
Error: reviwes Suggestion: reviews
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 653 350
No. of Characters: 3174 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.055 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.861 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.468 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 232 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 184 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 59.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.917 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.469 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.68 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 36.0 16.3942115768 220% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3225.0 2260.96107784 143% => OK
No of words: 621.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19323671498 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.991980728 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87019228262 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.341384863124 0.468620217663 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1010.7 705.55239521 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 103.0 22.8473053892 451% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 248.898685323 57.8364921388 430% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 537.5 119.503703932 450% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 103.5 23.324526521 444% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.0 5.70786347227 333% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 52.0 5.25449101796 990% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137931143126 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794572112834 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583944163661 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934563399004 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540238461399 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 54.8 14.3799401198 381% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -33.07 48.3550499002 -68% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 43.5 12.197005988 357% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.01 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.31 8.32208582834 136% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 12.3882235529 436% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 43.2 11.1389221557 388% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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