An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author tries to justify the need of promoting new variety of millet which is is high in vitamin A by government, by making a argument which seems to be fallacious and has many loopholes.
The author has not considered how many people have deficiency of vitamin A? If there are very few people having this type of deficiency then there is no need for government to make efforts to promote new variety of millet as it will not be feasible. The consequences of the deficiency of the vitamin A is also not mentioned? So if the consequences of deficiency of vitamin A is insignificant than this undermines the argument made by the author.
Suppose if the deficiency of vitamin A proves to be fatal than is there availability of funds for the government to subsidize the new variety of millet? If it is not feasible to subsidize the new variety of millet then this further undermines the argument made by the author.
Is the international organization reputed enough? is also not answered by the author in his/her argument. There is also no evidence provided for the effectiveness of the new variety of millet. Although the international department organization have engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A, does this organization has tested this millet on masses who deficiency of vitamin A and has it cured that deficiency from those masses.
The argument also makes a claim that millet is a staple food of people in Tagus. So, will the people buy which are used to buy regular variety of millet would be interested in buying new variety of millet as people in impoverished nation tend to be reactionary towards change? Introducing new variety of millet would be purchased by the people or not even after providing enough governmental support is also a bigger question that has to be addressed.
The author has not considered various factors such as amount of people having deficiency of vitamin A in the nation, the feasibility of subsidizing the new variety of millet by the government, the mindset of people to buy new variety of millet in his/her argument which makes the argument fallacious and should provide a suitable evidence and answer the above questions in his/her argument.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1794 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.734 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.869 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.459 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.478 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.732 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.231 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...f promoting new variety of millet which is is high in vitamin A by government, by mak...
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Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...h in vitamin A by government, by making a argument which seems to be fallacious a...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e fallacious and has many loopholes. The author has not considered how many p...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of the vitamin A is also not mentioned? So if the consequences of deficiency of vitam...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nes the argument made by the author. Suppose if the deficiency of vitamin A p...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to subsidize the new variety of millet? If it is not feasible to subsidize the new...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nes the argument made by the author. Is the international organization repute...
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Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...ernational organization reputed enough? is also not answered by the author in his/...
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Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...gh in vitamin A, does this organization has tested this millet on masses who defici...
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Line 7, column 363, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a deficiency'.
Suggestion: who is a deficiency
...zation has tested this millet on masses who deficiency of vitamin A and has it cured that defi...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d that deficiency from those masses. The argument also makes a claim that mil...
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Line 9, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...terested in buying new variety of millet as people in impoverished nation tend to...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r question that has to be addressed. The author has not considered various fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88563829787 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9175022785 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.377659574468 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.4272076503 57.8364921388 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.466666667 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.26666666667 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404711577744 0.218282227539 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162163821027 0.0743258471296 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811017435 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246346396633 0.128457276422 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546243858033 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.