An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Tagus is an impoverished nation with Vitamin A deficiency percolated in its roots. An International Development organisation has developed a new breed of millet which is high in Vitamin A and hopes to combat the Vitamin A deficiency in Tagus. The seeds are a bit more expensive but backed by subsidies from the government and it should do everything in its power to support the new type of millet.
The argument proposed contains a lot of logical fallacies and has taken numerous assumptions. Engineering a new breed of millet is a very good thing, but adequate testing and reaction with the human bodies can be taken only when it has been rolled out for a few years and it is therefore too strong to state that it will definitely cater to the deficiency in Tagus.
Government point of view and decision making has been assumed regarding the fact that they'll be giving subsidies to the farmers, there's a lot of gap in the context here, On what basis did the govt. decide and the amount of subsidies that they'll be offering, everything needs to be considered.
Nothing has been giving about the type of millet that will be produced and direct assumption has been taken that it will be perceived well by the public. Even though millet is the staple food, it is not safe to assume such things.
Government decisions are taken by a lot of deliberations and after seeing results, and such assumptions about the new millets and its effects are not able to justify that the government will be taking such steps and promoting this new type of millet.
The argument could however have been true, if more prominent and relevant data about the millet and the credibility of the International development organisation had been provided, and not to forget, the consumer preferences had not been so generalised. These kinds of assumptions leave a hole in the decision making process.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1526 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.695 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.727 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.737 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they'll
...as been assumed regarding the fact that theyll be giving subsidies to the farmers, the...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...yll be giving subsidies to the farmers, theres a lot of gap in the context here, On wh...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun gap seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of gaps'.
Suggestion: a lot of gaps
...giving subsidies to the farmers, theres a lot of gap in the context here, On what basis did ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they'll
...decide and the amount of subsidies that theyll be offering, everything needs to be con...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83591331269 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78568962952 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498452012384 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7442086362 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.166666667 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9166666667 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384693424663 0.218282227539 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133826138294 0.0743258471296 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124337631109 0.0701772020484 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183463721629 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140576020077 0.0628817314937 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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