"In a laboratory study of liquid antibacterial hand soaps, a concentrated solution of UltraClean produced a 40 percent greater reduction in the bacteria population than did the liquid hand soaps currently used in our hospitals. During a subsequent test of UltraClean at our hospital in Work by, that hospital reported significantly fewer cases of patient infection than did any of the other hospitals in our group. Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply ultraClean at all hand-washing stations throughout our hospital system."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The author of the argument purportedly highlights that in order to diminish the number of infections and diseases in hospitals, a liquid antibacterial hand soap should be used. However, the premises upon which he puts his claim are fallacious. For the support of which some well-established evidence should be given.
The first assumption that lacks some semblance of truth and can be overtly impugned is the fact that use ultraclean soaps decrease the bacteria by 40 percent than the current hand soaps. However, it does not lend credence to the argument since there is no sufficient evidence to support if this ultraclean soap is able to prevent any infection or disease. One point that should be considered is that there is a wide range of bacteria all over the world. So, what if this soap prevent just some infection? What if it becomes useless in a reduction of certain bacteria in the hospital? Indeed there is not a solid evidence to prove the effectiveness of this solution.
The author also asserts that the hospital reported fewer infections while using ultraclean hand soaps. Although it might seem tenable at a face, it has some defects due to the paucity of evidence that would consolidate the premise the otherwise. One of the main, if not the only, problem with the premise is that this report could not be reliable and accurate owing to the fact that maybe the hospital just wanted to advertise the solution in order to make a profit by selling thousands of this soap. Moreover, what if this solution create some other diseases? Or what if some people be sensitive to this solution? These are ideas that weaken the usefulness of the solution in a reduction of bacteria.
Putting the two previous assumptions aside, there is still room for doubt. As set forth by the author this solution has been successful at the laboratory. Nevertheless, the rationale behind this premise could be challenged owing to an unsettled evidence to support if results in the lab will be successful in the real world or can scientists put them in practice. One point that should not go unnoticed is that despite positive outcomes in the reduction of infections in the lab, there is no guarantee these results repeat exactly at the hospital. Indeed, there is a possibility that a weird conclusion is seen in the real world.
Having scrutinized all the premises, a logical conclusion that can be drawn is that there are pieces of evidence having been ignored by the author while the presence of which could add to the logic of each premise.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.751 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 585, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...on of certain bacteria in the hospital? Indeed there is not a solid evidence to prove ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s aside, there is still room for doubt. As set forth by the author this solution h...
^^
Line 9, column 216, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...could add to the logic of each premise.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87096774194 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70746641667 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476958525346 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8359378811 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156533911181 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503913738288 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698903156598 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.083727881067 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650590311659 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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