Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered
The argument has a lot of loopholes which has to be covered and answered to strengthen the point of the argument. It is based upon several factors which may or may not hold true at all times. Firstly, the analysis has to be reinforced by mentioning proper facts regarding how many people have been detected with Cow flu disease. What percentage of the people in that area or city are infected with cow flu? Further, how common is it in the other areas of the world? There could be other reasons why the cows are getting infected in the first place. Moreover, what percentage exactly did the argument meant when it mentioned a small possibility that a person may die due to the inoculations? Are there any efficient alternatives to counter this problem? The argument would be more clear if these questions were answered.
If the number of people or the percentage of infected people is large enough to be of concern, there should be measures taken at saving people's life. But, if the number of infected people is minuscule, it can be treated as a special case and be provided with the hospital facilities. As this factor is not being clarified in the argument, it would absolutely be facile to make a conclusion out of it.
Secondly, if it happens to be a widespread disease, Health Care Officials are supposed to be working day in and out addressing the disease. Though, it mentions in the argument that there is a small possibility that person may die as a result of the inoculations, it is not clear as to what percentage of people may die because of the inoculations. There could be several other reasons a person can die of. A person may already be infected by some other diseases which could be exacerbated by the inoculations. The inoculations may be a bit too strong for the old people which arises another question as to what age category of the people is more likely to get infected? If only the youth are prone to getting infected and the inoculations are harmful to only the old people with some other existing diseases, then it is absolutely risk-free to administer the cold flu with inoculations
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Another factor which needs to be answered is that what specific ingredient in the inoculation is actually causing harm? There could be a chance of developing a better alternative which may not be deleterious.
An audacious step should be taken at saving the lives of people with cow flu infections. The argument should be instilled with more facts and pertinent statistics which would be more comprehensive and easily addressed. The argument is lacking depth and is absurd without more rigorous research and information.
- Claim: In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimalrole in private business matters. 66
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. 75
- In order to help small businesses thrive, government should play a minimal role in private business matters. 50
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 50
- Universities should require students to take courses only within those fields they are interested in studying. 54
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2138 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.689 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.826 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.458 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.462 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 601, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mean'?
Suggestion: mean
...hat percentage exactly did the argument meant when it mentioned a small possibility t...
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Line 5, column 887, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...minister the cold flu with inoculations . Another factor which needs to be answe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, as to, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.6327345309 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 456.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80263157895 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80319413037 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445175438596 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9464871223 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2173913043 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8260869565 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253773730975 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821600499813 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540571682543 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146235098673 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555023183768 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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