Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument claims that inocculations against cow flu could save the lives of many, however this advantage is offset by the fact that there is a risk of death associated with this vaccine and therefore the vaccine cannot be routinely administered. The evidence required to support this claim should evaluate the risk of death from the cow flu and compare that with the risk of death from the cow flu vaccine. Such evidence would include risk factors putting pateints at a greater chance of death from the vaccine, population demographics, hygeine practices in areas where the disease is detected, population density in such areas and the effects of herd immunity.
Essentially, in order to support this argument, the evidence must suggest that the overall risk of death for the populaiton from the vaccine is similar or greater than that of death from contracting cow flu. The most basic method to create this comparison is to compare the death rates from the innoculation to the chances of contracting and dying from the cow flu. However, such evidence is inadequate as each area affected by this disease may have different contraction rates for the disease and different mortality rates for both the vaccine and the disease due to different risk factors. For example, an area with a low population density may have a lower mortality rate from the disease itself relative to an area of high population density due to the fact that the virus is more easily spread in an area of high population density. However, the risk of death from the vaccine is the same for both areas. In this case, the risk of death from the vaccine may be too great in areas of low population denisty relative to the odds of contracting and dying from the cow flu; however, in a high population density area this risk may be lower than the risk of contracting and dying from cow flu and the vaccine would be deemed worthwhile.
Hygeine practies and demographics of the area also play a role. If certain races, ethnicities, or age groups are at higher risk of reacting negatively to vaccine, dying form cow flu, or both, these factors must be considered. Also the general cleanliness of the population in certain areas, whether this due to hygeine practices of people themselves or the sanitation systems present in the area must also be considered.
Overall, this argument is difficult to defend or refute as the circumstances vary between locations where the cow flu is detected, making it difficult to validate the claim that the vaccine's risk of death will be universally greater than or equal to the risk of death from cow flu. Had the argument included the idea that the vaccine cannot be permited in certain areas due to the relative high risk of death, then the evidence obtained may support it. However, in this case, the evidence will likely weaken the arguemt that the routine admisitration of the vaccine should not be permitted in all areas.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Such evidence would include risk factors putting pateints at a greater chance of death from the vaccine, population demographics, hygeine practices in areas where the disease is detected, population density in such areas and the effects of herd immunity.
Error: pateints Suggestion: patients
Error: hygeine Suggestion: hygiene
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: Essentially, in order to support this argument, the evidence must suggest that the overall risk of death for the populaiton from the vaccine is similar or greater than that of death from contracting cow flu.
Error: populaiton Suggestion: population
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: The most basic method to create this comparison is to compare the death rates from the innoculation to the chances of contracting and dying from the cow flu.
Error: innoculation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, such evidence is inadequate as each area affected by this disease may have different contraction rates for the disease and different mortality rates for both the vaccine and the disease due to different risk factors.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: For example, an area with a low population density may have a lower mortality rate from the disease itself relative to an area of high population density due to the fact that the virus is more easily spread in an area of high population density.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, the risk of death from the vaccine is the same for both areas.
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: In this case, the risk of death from the vaccine may be too great in areas of low population denisty relative to the odds of contracting and dying from the cow flu; however, in a high population density area this risk may be lower than the risk of contracting and dying from cow flu and the vaccine would be deemed worthwhile.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: denisty Suggestion: density
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: Hygeine practies and demographics of the area also play a role.
Error: practies Suggestion: practices
Sentence: If certain races, ethnicities, or age groups are at higher risk of reacting negatively to vaccine, dying form cow flu, or both, these factors must be considered.
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: Also the general cleanliness of the population in certain areas, whether this due to hygeine practices of people themselves or the sanitation systems present in the area must also be considered.
Error: hygeine Suggestion: hygiene
Sentence: Had the argument included the idea that the vaccine cannot be permited in certain areas due to the relative high risk of death, then the evidence obtained may support it.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: permited Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
Sentence: However, in this case, the evidence will likely weaken the arguemt that the routine admisitration of the vaccine should not be permitted in all areas.
Error: admisitration Suggestion: administration
Error: arguemt Suggestion: argue
Error: vaccine Suggestion: active
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2388 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.757 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.56 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.467 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.344 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...both, these factors must be considered. Also the general cleanliness of the populati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85458167331 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62177807192 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.368525896414 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 779.4 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.0741194895 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.466666667 119.503703932 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4666666667 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189397058234 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821964904715 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382786967434 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1366807172 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271014576115 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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