"The Mozart school of music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the mozart school welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels;there is no audition to attend the school. Second,the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well os styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, Many mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
The author states that, Mozart musical is school is very well reputed musical school and graduates get highly paid job after completing their graduation.Whether Mozart musical institutions do not take any admission to recruit students in a musical classes even age doesn’t matter getting into that. However, there may be different kind of process to take students or may be those ages students already been qualified in respective musical field, before all these recommendations can be evaluated with three questions must be answered.
First of all, The author mentioned that the mozat school didn’t take any admission to get admitted into Mozart school. There may be something unstated about the recruitment process or may be the school appointed those students in others criteria but it’s still dubious or unknown. It may be just an assumption that there is no admission even. We need more information to understand their process. As the author also states that the Mozart musical school is very popular in the country, we can say that the musical school has some special criteria to recruit student we need more information to state the argument.
Secondly, the school has may be special instrument to learn proper way music. They may have vast amount of instrument to teach music music all kinds of people whether every ages people can participate to learn music. If any institution have all kinds of modern instruments so that students can catch every essential instrument to go further in their respective field. We can also assume that the school has also experienced instructor to teach insightful way but we still do not know about something we need more information to state that. Can we provide proper explanation by only this information?
Thirdly, We are sure that the mozal scholars are getting high paid in their respective job field. This evidence ensure us they have every kind of instrument or instructor to teach or learn the music. Even this states also vulnerable i think because the author states that all ages people can join mozart school. May be ages people already know the musical instrument or may be they know how to perform well. We also need more evidence to support this argument.
- "The Mozart school of music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the mozart school welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels;there is no audition to attend the school. Second 23
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ???? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1815 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.892 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.882 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.199 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whether
...d job after completing their graduation.Whether Mozart musical institutions do not take...
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Line 9, column 128, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: music
...have vast amount of instrument to teach music music all kinds of people whether every ages ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 234, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...music. Even this states also vulnerable i think because the author states that a...
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Line 13, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Even this states also vulnerable i think because the author states that all ages ...
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Line 13, column 372, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
... already know the musical instrument or may be they know how to perform well. We also ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10326086957 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70175801961 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451086956522 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5749659246 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.470588235 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270480077586 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098414889102 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779935414039 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198863822101 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537769405528 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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