Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Nature's Way a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products is opening its next franchise in Plainsville town. The Nature's Way store expects that its franchise in Plainsville will be very successful, however the Nature's Way store's conclusion that the franchise will be very successful is based on several assumptions, all of which, if false could make the conclusion fall apart.
The argument states that the residents of Plainsville lead a very healthy life. The argument however is not specifying how Plainsville residents are living their healthy lives. Nature's Way is a company that sells health products and other health-related items. If the residents of Plainsville town are have a natural resistance against much of the common diseases that effect people and also if the culture of the residents in Plainsville involve many actvities that are outdoor related, then the residents of Plainsville may not rely too much on health food and health-related products and they may not opt for the products offered by Nature's Way. If the argument had specified the dependence of the residents of Plainsville on health food and other health related-products in leading their healthy life then the argument could have had some strength.
The residents of the Plainsville after the recent governmental adverstisement on food items but only foods that have the Government's Grade 1 certification. Nature's Way chain of stores presently sell health food and health-related product that are only Grade 2. Given that Grade 1 foods are of superior quality compared to Grade 2, chances of the residents in Plainsville to buy produicts of Nature's Way is not guarrantted, considering the fact Nature's Way chain of stores' main competitor had recently got Grade 1 certification for its health food. Had the argument specified that the amount of importance that the residents of Plainsville put on the grade assignement by the givernment, then the argument could have had some strength.
The different merchants of Plainsville who sell sports related items such as running shoes, exercise clothes say thet their sales are at an all time high. They have not mentioned about the number of sales of the running shoes and exercise clothes. This all time high cannot be considered as a guaranteing factor of the Nature's Way at Plainsville, because may the number of running shoes sold last month may be a single digit number and the sales might have simply become a double digit number. The instructors at the weight training classes and health clubs have not mentioned about the number of members that they are currently having. Plainsville is only having a two health clubs and a single weight training institute, both the health clubs and the weight training institure have a capacity of maximum fifty members. Had the argument specified about the number residents at the Plainsville and also the percentage of residents of Plainsville who engage in sports related the activities then the argument could have had some strength.
Finally, the argument assumes that just because the residents of Plainsville lead a healthy life, the Nature's Way franchise at Plainsville town will be a very big success. The argument however is making several assumptions, all of which need to be addressed for the argument's conclusion to be valid.
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Sentence: If the residents of Plainsville town are have a natural resistance against much of the common diseases that effect people and also if the culture of the residents in Plainsville involve many actvities that are outdoor related, then the residents of Plainsville may not rely too much on health food and health-related products and they may not opt for the products offered by Nature's Way.
Error: health-related Suggestion: health related
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: actvities Suggestion: activities
Sentence: If the argument had specified the dependence of the residents of Plainsville on health food and other health related-products in leading their healthy life then the argument could have had some strength.
Error: related-products Suggestion: related products
Sentence: The residents of the Plainsville after the recent governmental adverstisement on food items but only foods that have the Government's Grade 1 certification.
Error: adverstisement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Nature's Way chain of stores presently sell health food and health-related product that are only Grade 2.
Error: health-related Suggestion: health related
Sentence: Given that Grade 1 foods are of superior quality compared to Grade 2, chances of the residents in Plainsville to buy produicts of Nature's Way is not guarrantted, considering the fact Nature's Way chain of stores' main competitor had recently got Grade 1 certification for its health food.
Error: produicts Suggestion: products
Error: guarrantted Suggestion: guaranteed
Sentence: Had the argument specified that the amount of importance that the residents of Plainsville put on the grade assignement by the givernment, then the argument could have had some strength.
Error: givernment Suggestion: government
Error: assignement Suggestion: assignment
Sentence: The different merchants of Plainsville who sell sports related items such as running shoes, exercise clothes say thet their sales are at an all time high.
Error: thet Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This all time high cannot be considered as a guaranteing factor of the Nature's Way at Plainsville, because may the number of running shoes sold last month may be a single digit number and the sales might have simply become a double digit number.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: guaranteing Suggestion: guaranteeing
Sentence: Plainsville is only having a two health clubs and a single weight training institute, both the health clubs and the weight training institure have a capacity of maximum fifty members.
Error: institure Suggestion: institute
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 541 350
No. of Characters: 2769 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.823 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.118 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.887 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 117 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 80 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.474 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.315 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f Plainsville lead a very healthy life. The argument however is not specifying how ...
^^^
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...f the residents of Plainsville town are have a natural resistance against much of th...
^^^^
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Way) must be used with a third-person verb: 'chains'.
Suggestion: chains
...ents Grade 1 certification. Natures Way chain of stores presently sell health food an...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of stores presently sell health food and health-related product that are only Gra...
^^
Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Way) must be used with a third-person verb: 'chains'.
Suggestion: chains
...ntted, considering the fact Natures Way chain of stores main competitor had recently ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 115, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Way) must be used with a third-person verb: 'franchises'.
Suggestion: franchises
...le lead a healthy life, the Natures Way franchise at Plainsville town will be a very big ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 267, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...l of which need to be addressed for the arguments conclusion to be valid.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2804.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 541.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18299445471 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90523976052 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.382624768946 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 843.3 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.7681047496 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.578947368 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4736842105 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334816973033 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141420459117 0.0743258471296 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157403947031 0.0701772020484 224% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247927545087 0.128457276422 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.163852693828 0.0628817314937 261% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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