One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
The owner asserts that Modifying showerheads in rest of the buildings will increase the overall profit. To support this recommendation the owner he stated some factors. For the first three building showerheads are modified to restrict the maximum water flow. He assumes that it will result in savings for the apartment. Since the adjustment, they have received only a few complaints. However, due to lack of logical explanation and doubtful remarks, his standpoint does not seem valid.
First of all, the owner unfairly assumes that the change will result in savings. But actual recordings of before and after usage of water is not available. So without having the actual reading the assumption is faulty. It is entirely possible that people will use the shower for longer period of time due to less water flow. So it can eventually increase the usage of water in the apartment complex. So, without ruling out this assumption, the owner can not justify his recommendation.
Even if we assume that the change will bring savings, we can not ignore the possibility that people who are not complaining are okay with the change of water flow. It can be entirely possible that people who are not complaining are facing problems with the change and they might be planning to shift from the apartment. Again it will not be wise to think all the residents of the twelve apartments will react in a same way. Perhaps residents of other apartments will complain more than the three buildings. If these scenario have merits, then it will create more loss than savings.
Again, the apartment owner assumes that changing all the showerheads will bring profit. Profit is not only a factor of revenue but also cost. Perhaps, the overall savings from modifying the water flow will not outweigh the cost of modifying them. Because if the residents of the apartment increase the water usage time due to less water flow, it will bring less savings. If the above is true, the conclusion drawn in the argument is weakened at best.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is significantly weakened due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the owner can justify all the factors stated above, then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the recommendation of modifying the maximum water flow in order to make profit.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 1883 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.804 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.577 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.169 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...t people will use the shower for longer period of time due to less water flow. So it can event...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a same way" with adverb for "same"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nts of the twelve apartments will react in a same way. Perhaps residents of other apartments ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 511, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scenario' or 'these scenarios'?
Suggestion: this scenario; these scenarios
...plain more than the three buildings. If these scenario have merits, then it will create more l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 358, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun savings is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e due to less water flow, it will bring less savings. If the above is true, the conc...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94642857143 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66089771806 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451530612245 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4526769814 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.7916666667 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225965099638 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074811012277 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953502250648 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141593699861 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048112770613 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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