The owner of the Sunny Tower apartment complex wrote a letter to its manager to elucidate his opinion that by modifying showerheads to restrict their maximum water flow, the commercial company can increase their profits. He provided two pieces of evidence: less fees for the water and no complaints. But his evidences are fallacious and fraught of his subjective assumptions. There are many realistic factors needed to be took into consideration.
First, he said that the statics about whether the amount of water used has decreased was not available. To put it in another way, he lacked convincing evidence and replaced it with his assumption that is habitants definitely would use less water. But why? When you need to wash your fetid clothes, water which is damped into the machine doesn’t change. When your want to wash an apple, you just wash them for a longer time with restricted water flow. The author fabricates a chimera where citizens’ need will shrink just as the restricted water flow. So, his subjective enigma cannot be used to support the complex’s future management.
Second, the author just gave a mention of a few complaints and ignored the content of habitants’ complaints. There is possibility that they have been furious about this adjustment. Maybe the contract which was signed by two parts had relevant regulations of the water flow or maybe they think they needn’t surrender for one company’s commercial affairs. But the company shouldn’t forget that their service is fungible from the aspect of customers. If their policy galls habitants, they can switch to other companies. If so, the profits will decrease to a large degree.
Third, even if all these assumptions mentioned above cannot be really blocks, the author planned to promote his suggestions to other buildings. He also failed to consider the long-term effect. Habitants may be frugal as a response to the fervid call. But how many will persist on insisting this habit. Indeed, they haven’t be aware of their responsibility of saving water for the whole Earth. And the company failed to make them cognizant of their moral responsibility. Instead, the company just gave people the hint that they need to prolificate its profits and forced them to do so. Another question is whether other building’s habitants will respond to the company’s policy? Sometimes the needs differ from the downtown to the countryside and some don’t care but others will denounce invading their freedom. When lacking enough analysis, it is risky to promote some significant measures.
In the end, the author of this letter didn’t give compelling evidence to support his suggestion and needed an insightful survey to make the final edition for the company.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2216 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.15 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.237 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.237 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun fees is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ts. He provided two pieces of evidence: less fees for the water and no complaints. B...
^^^^
Line 4, column 316, Rule ID: HASNT_IRREGULAR_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'haven’t been'?
Suggestion: haven’t been
...t on insisting this habit. Indeed, they haven’t be aware of their responsibility of saving...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2302.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 446.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16143497758 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75102148412 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558295964126 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6171305983 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2592592593 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5185185185 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.92592592593 5.70786347227 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149400039248 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319241045644 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617799705406 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842375628844 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728188554025 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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