Our team has completed its research on suitable building sites for a new HobCo hobby Shop in the city of Grilldon. We discovered that there are currently no hobby shops in southeastern Grilldon. When our researchers conducted a poll of area residents, 88 percent of those who responded indicated that they would welcome the opening of a hobby shop in southeastern Grilldon. Grilldon is in a region of the nation in which the hobby business has increased by 300 percent during the past decade. In addition, Grilldon has a very large population of retirees, a demographic with ample time to devote to hobbies. We therefore recommend that you choose southeastern Grilldon as the site for your next HobCo Hobby Shop. We predict that a shop in this area will draw a steady stream of enthusiastic new HobCo customers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument that Southeastern Grilldon should be chosen as the site for the next HobCo Hobby Shop seems logical at first glance. However, the argument is rife with holes and assumptions, with no clear evidence, and thus, the prediction that the new shop will draw a steady stream of enthusiastic new customers, might go wrong as well.
First, the president mentions about a poll of the area residents, informing that 88% of those who responded would welcome the shop. It is not clear, however, the scope and validity of the survey. We don’t exactly know how many people were involved in the survey. It is possible that the survey included only 10-15 people, out of which 88% welcomed the idea. How many of those people were retirees? What do these people do for a living? Did they have any particular idea about what the Hobby Shop would be about? We don’t know any details about the survey, so it would be very ambivalent to advert to this survey.
Additionally, the president suggests that because the city has a very large population of retirees, it would be beneficial for the Hobby Shop. This may be true, but, a business cannot be set up on this conjecture. It is highly possible that the retirees have a union of their own, they are involved in one business or the other. To strengthen his/her argument, the president should conduct a survey asking the retirees about the idea of opening a Hobby Shop in Southeastern Grilldon.
Grilldon is in a region where the Hobby Business has increased by 300 percent. Yet, there is not even a single Hobby Shop in this area. This is something to be thought upon, rather than just taking the statement diplomatically, and predicting that it would benefit the new business.
Maybe, the people in this area are so much involved in some other activities that they don’t have time for the Hobby Business. It can also be inferred that no one before HubCo, had thought of setting up a business shop in this area. All these points need to be validated by the president before giving the orders of setting up a new shop.
In conclusion, the president would not necessarily be wrong about the prediction that the new shop will draw a steady stream of enthusiastic new customers. After all, the area consists of a lot of retirees, and the hobby business has increased by 300 percent in the region. But to support the current prediction, the president must present more conclusive and validated evidences.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'after all', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.223849372385 0.25644967241 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.148535564854 0.15541462614 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0753138075314 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0523012552301 0.0520304965353 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0271966527197 0.0272364105082 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123430962343 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0397489539749 0.0416121511921 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60709260014 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0125523012552 0.026700313972 47% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00627615062762 0.001811407834 346% => OK
Determiners: 0.146443514644 0.113004496875 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0313807531381 0.0255425247493 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146443514644 0.0127820249294 115% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2459.0 2731.13054187 90% => OK
No of words: 426.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77230046948 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31220657277 0.378187486979 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.237089201878 0.287650121315 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171361502347 0.208842608468 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110328638498 0.135150697306 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60709260014 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 207.018472906 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469483568075 0.469332199767 100% => OK
Word variations: 51.4471204262 52.1807786196 99% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5217391304 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3618791119 57.7814097925 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.913043478 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.521739130435 0.724660767414 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 42.2306593182 51.9672348444 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.69724770642 1.8405768891 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314457190582 0.441005458295 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128919900751 0.135418324435 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0537588721053 0.0829849096947 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.550988874689 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147775677614 0.147661913831 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126259333118 0.193483328276 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684145382818 0.0970749176394 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.396663243202 0.42659136922 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0697380270445 0.0774707102158 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214780645851 0.312017818177 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217675170182 0.0698173142475 31% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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