"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
The argument makes many unwarranted assumptions about the causes of sidewalk rage. It proposes a ban on usage of phones on sidewalks assuming it to be the ultimate cause for sidewalk rage. Children are assumed to be predominantly vulnerable to sidewalk rage. It also makes an assumption that outcome of the ban in Centerville will be similar to that in Middletown and fails to take into account various factors of the population.
The first assumption is that imposing a ban on the usage of phones on the sidewalk will be the panacea for the problem. The number of people walking on the sidewalk is a pivotal parameter to be considered while examining the causes for sidewalk rage. When surfeit amount of people taking the sidewalk, people will be frustrated to walk in such a congested environment. This frustration transitions to rage when they encounter a highly crowded path while going to work. The stress to reach ones workplace on time concomitant with the agitation caused by high levels of congestion in that path adds fuel to fire and it influences their thoughts and makes them take grave choices.
The argument also assumes the fact that the outcome of the ban in Centerville will be similar to that in Middletown. This assumption is inherently flawed due to a deluge of reasons. The prime reason is that Middletown and Centerville may not have the same population density. The population of Middletown maybe completely different to that of Centerville, both in number and economic status. The town of Centerville may have a high per capita income compared to Middletown resulting in myriad vehicles in town. That will result in less people taking the sidewalks. If the population density is low compared to Middletown,that will result in less number of sidewalk rage-related incidents. The technological prowess of the town is also a pivotal factor. If Centerville is a technologically backward town, then the usage of mobile phones among the people will be sporadic.In that case, ban on mobile phones will be superfluous. This assumption needs a lot of comparative studies between the two towns' population,economic status and other factors to buttress the assumption.
The third assumption of the argument states the children are most vulnerable to sidewalk rage due to their height. This
assumption is also flawed as it does not take into account the age and height distribution of people in that region.
Old age people are also highly vulnerable to sidewalk rage due to their reduced mobility (which is a consequence of their age).
Hence, the argument makes a lot of flawed assumptions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2136 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.922 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.851 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.511 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...hile going to work. The stress to reach ones workplace on time concomitant with the ...
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Line 9, column 393, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le, both in number and economic status. The town of Centerville may have a high per...
^^^
Line 9, column 532, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...d vehicles in town. That will result in less people taking the sidewalks. If the pop...
^^^^
Line 9, column 621, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , that
...on density is low compared to Middletown,that will result in less number of sidewalk ...
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Line 9, column 871, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...hones among the people will be sporadic.In that case, ban on mobile phones will be...
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Line 9, column 1010, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , economic
...studies between the two towns population,economic status and other factors to buttress th...
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Line 13, column 120, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sidewalk rage due to their height. This assumption is also flawed as it does no...
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Line 15, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Assumption
...walk rage due to their height. This assumption is also flawed as it does not take into...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, then, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09744779582 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01414526493 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433874709977 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9178796277 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5217391304 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7391304348 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4347826087 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117164066329 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425027597686 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426283621352 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0597309168227 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463070542833 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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