Over the past two years , the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many central plaza store owners believe that decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There also has been dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here. we predict that business in central plaza will return to previously high levels.
It is certain that skateboard being an adventure is available in central plaza ,it is obvious that the number of people coming to plaza is solely for enjoying the sport. But the argument that prohibiting skateboard to increase sales does not guarantee that business will return the same way as it was before skateboard activity coming to plaza.
The fact that skateboarding is very different and falls apart from every other shops in the plaza as it not only attracts the local citizens but also tourists coming to the city. Skateboarding is enjoyed by people of all age and can be done as many times as wished, Children being a major contributor to the skateboard. On the other hand, shopping for other things such as clothes, shoes, makeup, toys are not done in a large scale
Consider a scenario where the shops whose business affected have primary business of clothes, shoes, makeup, etc. In these kind of businesses a large chunk of visitors purchase if only there is a dire requirement of these articles or if some event is around. Such kind of businesses make their best revenue during festive sales or on big discounts.
On the other hand skateboard is one of those things which can be done any time of the year, by anyone as much as they wish. Mentioning of the increase in the litter and vandalism , better facilities of cleanup can be provided and stricter rules or fines can be charged on vandalizing any shop owners product.
A better business ideas and strategies can be planned and executed to increase the business . However the author’s argument that prohibiting skateboarding will increase sales is not likely to assure growth in their business. Skateboarding only not increases their own business but also attracts more customers to plaza. It maybe indirectly bringing these shops in customers attention during the off season and unknowingly bringing a little sales to these shops on daily basis.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ???? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1563 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.629 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.052 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.651 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... adventure is available in central plaza ,it is obvious that the number of people ...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ness of clothes, shoes, makeup, etc. In these kind of businesses a large chunk of visitors...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the increase in the litter and vandalism , better facilities of cleanup can be pro...
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Line 9, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ed and executed to increase the business . However the author’s argument that proh...
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Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...and executed to increase the business . However the author’s argument that prohibiting ...
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Line 9, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... customers to plaza. It maybe indirectly bringing these shops in customers attent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, apart from, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95679012346 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68064464196 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524691358025 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3692878828 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.538461538 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191978159234 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765079576425 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060903367707 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109228446986 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679111600905 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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