The package of benefits and incentives that Ready-to-Ware offers to professional staff is too costly. Our quarterly profits have declined since the package was introduced two years ago, at the time of our incorporation. Moreover, the package had little positive effect, as we have had only marginal success in recruiting and training high-quality professional staff. To become more profitable again, Ready-to-Ware should, therefore, offer the reduced benefits package that was in place two years ago and use the savings to fund our current research and development initiatives.
The argument presented by the Ready-to-Ware company has some validity in theory, however it lacks key information that would assist in identifying if the reasoning is truly valid. Their stance is that the current benefits package is too expensive and is a possible reason for a decline in company profits. Additionally, they believe the benefits package is unsuccessful in recruiting and training high-quality staff and that by offering a reduced package, they can increase profitability by reallocating funds to their research and development. there are a few key assumptions they are making in their argument that require additional information to be validated. without this additional information, this argument rests solely on assumption and not fact.
The first key flaw with this argument is around the idea of their decline in profitability. The argument heavily implies that the benefits and incentives that is currently offered is a reason for the company’s decline in profits. without any factual evidence to back this claim up, it simply cannot be taken as a fact. there are many reasons why the Ready-to-Ware company may have declining profits. these could include rising costs of hard goods, higher competition, a change in leadership, and many other factors. A few questions that would be helpful to have answered are the following. does your competition have a similar benefits and incentives package, and if so, are they able to maintain profitability? was there a loss in revenue over the last two years? was there an increase in hard costs, regulatory costs, or any other type of cost that could be impacting the bottom line of the company? And per employee, what is the cost to the company of offering better benefits and incentives? if those questions were answered we could draw a better conclusion in regards to the relationship between the company’s profitability and the introduction of the current benefits and incentives package.
The second key flaw with this argument is around the assumption that reallocating funds from the benefits and incentives package into research and development will result in increased profitability for the company. there is no evidence presented that a current lack in research and development funds is holding the company back from maintaining profit margins. it is very possible that research and development would, in fact, help increase profitability. however, it is equally as likely that the existing research and development team does not have the right employees leading their projects and an increase in funds in their department would not yield a significant gain to the company. one would need to answer some key questions in order to draw a direct conclusion from this assumption. these include the following. has the research and development team been lacking funds in recent years? is research and development accepted as a key area for increased revenue in this industry? is the current research and development team staffed appropriately? do other research and development teams offer very attractive benefits and incentives programs? without answering those key questions, this portion of the overall argument relies completely on assumption and not fact.
The third key flaw with the argument is in regards to the history of the benefits and incentives packages. without understanding why the change was made to a more attractive program two years ago, one cannot assume that their previous program was acceptable. it is very possible that their previous benefits and incentives program was a detriment to the company and resulted in employees leaving for competitors who offered better programs. this could have resulted in a turnover period that required the company to hire and train new staff, potentially impacting profitability. without any additional information in, the argument presented is simply an assumption. one would need to to answer many questions regarding the previous plan in order to draw a final conclusion. these questions would include: what was the reason for the change to the benefits and incentives program? what types of programs do your competitors offer? was Ready-to-Ware losing employees because of the benefits package two years ago? without answers to these questions, we are left with assumptions, and cannot fully judge the argument.
While on the surface this argument may make some logical sense, it lacks a great deal of information that is integral to identifying if this is a valid argument. The company certainly needs to make some type of change in order to regain profitability, however the benefits and incentives program could very well have nothing to do with the decline in profitability. The additional questions that have been presented in my analysis would allow us to gain a greater understanding of the facts, and thus make a better decision regarding whether or not the actions proposed would solve the profitability problem. Until those questions are answered, this argument rests solely on assumption.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 799 350
No. of Characters: 4163 1500
No. of Different Words: 266 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.317 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.21 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.906 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 307 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 267 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 185 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 113 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.183 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, third, thus, well, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.6327345309 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 11.1786427146 313% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 28.8173652695 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 55.5748502994 175% => OK
Nominalization: 41.0 16.3942115768 250% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4268.0 2260.96107784 189% => OK
No of words: 799.0 441.139720559 181% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34167709637 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.31663314986 4.56307096286 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01524294532 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 204.123752495 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.366708385482 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1337.4 705.55239521 190% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 4.96107784431 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 41.0 19.7664670659 207% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.8755511965 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.097560976 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.487804878 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9756097561 5.70786347227 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.25449101796 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 8.20758483034 256% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173094347387 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501982192821 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643281535628 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112130592794 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490829323039 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 98.500998004 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 12.3882235529 129% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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