The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped rentals allowed at each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day. This will significantly reduce the number of summertime accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The neighboring island of Torseau actually saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents last year when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. To help reduce moped accidents, therefore, we should also enforce these limitations during the summer months."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While it may be true that reduction of accidents ought to be top priority for Balmer Island town council, the author's argument does not make a cogent case for reduction in number of moped rentals allowed. It is easy to understand the author's need to keep the citizens out of harm's way, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to build the case.
To begin with, the author has made a crude assumption that the entirety of population uses the moped in Summer vacations. It may not be true that all of the 50 mopeds present in the rental shops are actually in use. Despite the added population, people may not be interested in riding mopeds in Summer at all, instead opting cycles, or cars as a mode of transport. In this case, reducing the number of moped rentals allowed, from 50 per day to 30 per day, may actually fail to help reduce the number of accidents.
Additionally, it is not clear from the author's statement whether number of mopeds are the sole reason for summertime accidents. Though these accidents involve mopeds and pedestrians, they may be a result of lack of road safety, namely properly working traffic signals, or walkways. The accidents may also be a result vast number of people strolling on the road, or the ignorance shown by pedestrians. In such case, once again, the author's claim to lower the number of mopeds seems to be weak.
Talking about the island of Torseau, the author mentions its number of accidents to be reduced by 50% since last year. The reason for this is stated as putting limits on the moped rentals. However, the author fails to compare the number of accidents occurring in Torseau and Balmer. If the accidents in Torseau are negligible as compared to the ones in Balmer, then the entire statistic that the assumption is based on, proves to be invalid. Furthermore, the author does not posses a strong proof of whether the accidents in Torseau are actually reduced as a result of minimizing the number of vehicles.
Road side and traffic safety are serious matters to tend to, taking into account the lives and health of the citizens. Adopting safety education, maintenance of road and vehicles, and overall attentiveness of the drivers, as well as pedestrians, will help to support the former statement. However, the author's argument regarding the reduction of limit on moped rental is not necessarily a solution to the given problem.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 1957 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.513 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.752 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ity for Balmer Island town council, the authors argument does not make a cogent case fo...
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Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...mmer vacations. It may not be true that all of the 50 mopeds present in the rental shops a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Additionally, it is not clear from the authors statement whether number of mopeds are ...
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Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...umber of mopeds are the sole reason for summertime accidents. Though these accidents invol...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 303, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...port the former statement. However, the authors argument regarding the reduction of lim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, thus, well, while, talking about, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81861575179 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60804921348 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494033412888 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0114359852 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.166666667 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213253735581 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705495971278 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503829724938 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116772856357 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519676894545 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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