According to the author, due to the recent invasion of deep sea fishermen into habitat of Madagascar shrimp , there has been significant decrease in popolation of shrimp. Now the autor claims that since the breeding season is approaching their number will increase but will not increase enough in number so as to sustain the invasion of fishing boats and might be extinct. So author is trying to indicate towards the fact that these fishermen are hunting large number of Madagascar shrimp and their reproduction cycle is not sufficient enough to sustain the invasion or attack my thes fishermen and soon might perish. This statement seems plausible but seems to have a couple of flaws in the argument.
First thing is that we are not explicitely being told why the number of Madagascar shrimps are decreasing drastically. There can be number of reasons apart from the fact that fishermen are hunting. There can be a deep sea oil reifenery which is actually polluting the sea around. Thus it might be the case that a large number of Madagascar shrimps are dying due to pollution at sea and that is the major cause of decline in population. Another plausible reason could be that, climatic conditions are changing and maybe a predator that earlier could not roam around in the waters near shrimp are able to come and are devouring upon these colonies of shrimps. Thus, there is a significant decrease in number of shrimps. Also it is possible that, inhospitable climate has been gradually reducing population of these Madagascar shrimps which has only been evident now. These things need to be crucially analyzed before commenting that the fishermen are only reason for depletion in number of Madagascar shrimps.
Secondly, author claims that although it will be breeding season, number of Madagascar shrimps will not be increasing significantly before fishermen will be arriving again. This point seems vague and without any substantial statistical inference. We have no idea as to why author claims that the number of shrimps will not increase in due time period. Factors affecting that can be the factor which is actually causing reduction in the species population. There has also been arbitrary use of a statistical jargon that is trend. Now we are not being explicitely being told what trend is supposed to continue here. Is the trend of fishermen going to sea for hunting is going to continue or is the trend for Madagascar shrimp be unable to reproduce more during breeding time.
Author also claims that species will become endangered once the species number become very limited. A species becomes endangered only if there has been significant decrease in population all around the globe. It is plausible that population swum to better conidtions so populations might decrease at one place but has increases significantly at another thus not making them endangered.
The final conclusion that author got out is legit if we have sorted out all the gaps in authors arguments. Until those have been answered, author's claim seems to be a bit arbitrary and not convincing in some sense.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: According to the author, due to the recent invasion of deep sea fishermen into habitat of Madagascar shrimp , there has been significant decrease in popolation of shrimp.
Error: popolation Suggestion: population
Sentence: Now the autor claims that since the breeding season is approaching their number will increase but will not increase enough in number so as to sustain the invasion of fishing boats and might be extinct.
Error: autor Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: So author is trying to indicate towards the fact that these fishermen are hunting large number of Madagascar shrimp and their reproduction cycle is not sufficient enough to sustain the invasion or attack my thes fishermen and soon might perish.
Error: thes Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: First thing is that we are not explicitely being told why the number of Madagascar shrimps are decreasing drastically.
Error: explicitely Suggestion: explicitly
Sentence: There can be a deep sea oil reifenery which is actually polluting the sea around.
Error: reifenery Suggestion: refinery
Sentence: Now we are not being explicitely being told what trend is supposed to continue here.
Error: explicitely Suggestion: explicitly
Sentence: It is plausible that population swum to better conidtions so populations might decrease at one place but has increases significantly at another thus not making them endangered.
Error: conidtions Suggestion: conditions
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2540 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.951 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.641 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.149 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hermen into habitat of Madagascar shrimp , there has been significant decrease in ...
^^
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: enough
...ber will increase but will not increase enough in number so as to sustain the invasion of fishin...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... but will not increase enough in number so as to sustain the invasion of fishing boats a...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...h is actually polluting the sea around. Thus it might be the case that a large numbe...
^^^^
Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... around. Thus it might be the case that a large number of Madagascar shrimps are dying due to pol...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 719, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nificant decrease in number of shrimps. Also it is possible that, inhospitable clima...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, apart from, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 47.0 19.6327345309 239% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2585.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 513.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03898635478 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68987077296 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430799220273 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4561920345 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.708333333 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201590925646 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650410709288 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561651724125 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.096539608913 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650955347193 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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