According to the argument given, it is assumed that Corporateville is better place to reside in than Middlesburg. So, it has decided to shift there. Moreover they have also stated that employees do not like to live in an urban setup and since Middlesburg has urban setup, they will prefer to shift to Corporateville. This weakens the argument that SuperCorp is providing for them to shift.
First thing, is there has been surge of hoemowners in Corporateville. Eventually more businesses will come to Coproprateville, seeing the possibility of potential customers and hospitable conditions. This leads to eventual urbanaisation of Corporateville and within no time it will possibily more urban in nature compared to Middlesburg.
Second thing is that a survey of SuperCorp employees was taken seems to be vague for the decision that has to be taken. We have no idea if the survey was taken from a random sample of people or survey was taken of the whole company headquarter or selective (not random at all) people only. This can effect the result majorly. So, just saying survey was taken is kind of vague and does not give us whole picture.
Third thing is, it is considered as safer place to work at Corporateville, but this is on the basis of Corporateville being not urban enough. No statistical data has been provided about the crime rates in corporateville, which might be mugging or robbing. Without taking these things in consideration we cannot say that Corporatville is better than Middlesburg.
Finally, there has been recent surge in homeowners in Middlesburg and it is said that taxes are low, this doesn't specify if all takes are low, it is possible that property taxes are low but taxes on assets might be high or getting resources in Middlesburg for a large company to function might be high. So, that should be carefully thought of before making any such decesion.
If all these conditions are sorted and has been thought off clearly by homeowners then I will say that it is a good decision for SuperCorp to shift to Corporateville. But I don not see this as the best decision as there has not been mentioned any major issue that company has to work in Middlesburg.
This rests my stance, that there are many reasons why this argument seems to be weak and needs thorough deliberation.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: So, that should be carefully thought of before making any such decesion.
Error: decesion Suggestion: decision
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flaws:
The arguments are not well organized.
This is argument 1:
The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live then Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters.
This is argument 2:
Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban.
This is argument 3:
Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1868 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.741 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.875 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.035 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...urg. So, it has decided to shift there. Moreover they have also stated that employees do...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...and it is said that taxes are low, this doesnt specify if all takes are low, it is pos...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...arge company to function might be high. So, that should be carefully thought of before m...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 57, Rule ID: THINK_OFF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of'?
Suggestion: of
...ditions are sorted and has been thought off clearly by homeowners then I will say t...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, third, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86768447837 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96784189554 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493638676845 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0379568225 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.684210526 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153264183242 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045170323269 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429281551724 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0702784419939 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396402928375 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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