Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
The author does make an important rationale regarding the alarming reduction of Madagascan shrimp, however, the hypothesis that the reduction related only due to incursions by deep-sea fishermen for hunting the Madagascan shrimp isin't complete and needs to be further evaluated with concrete evidence.
The hunting of Madagascan shrimp by the fishermen is not new and has been going on since the late 1970's when they were first discovered as an exotic delicacy indemic to the neighbouring islands. Having said that, the numbers have started decreasing until recently. We need to assess if the consumption of MS increased globally or not.
There needs to be a comprehensive study performed to evaluate other factors that might lead to a sudden drop in number : does rise in average water temperature due to global warming casue this? Majority of the flaura and fauna found in the deep waters are heavily dependant on the water temperatures. The coral reefs in maldives is set go extinct by 2025 for the same reasons.
Has there been a exponential rise in a predator species in that area. A recent ban was put in action by the OSC(Ocean welfare society) to stop the hunting of Sharks. Though this has been fo significant help in rising the number of sharks worldwide, but this is also means there a increase of natural hunters scavanging food for there survival.
With all the said, the author does present a pressing issue with the decrease in MS, there needs to be some detailed research needed to be able to accurately determine the cause of the population drop.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The hunting of Madagascan shrimp by the fishermen is not new and has been going on since the late 1970's when they were first discovered as an exotic delicacy indemic to the neighbouring islands.
Error: neighbouring Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: indemic Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There needs to be a comprehensive study performed to evaluate other factors that might lead to a sudden drop in number : does rise in average water temperature due to global warming casue this?
Error: casue Suggestion: case
Sentence: Majority of the flaura and fauna found in the deep waters are heavily dependant on the water temperatures.
Error: dependant Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: flaura Suggestion: flour
Sentence: The coral reefs in maldives is set go extinct by 2025 for the same reasons.
Error: maldives Suggestion: males
Sentence: Though this has been fo significant help in rising the number of sharks worldwide, but this is also means there a increase of natural hunters scavanging food for there survival.
Error: scavanging Suggestion: savaging
Error: fo Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1276 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.815 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.253 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.045 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hermen for hunting the Madagascan shrimp isint complete and needs to be further e...
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Line 6, column 265, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
...na found in the deep waters are heavily dependant on the water temperatures. The coral re...
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Line 8, column 16, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...for the same reasons. Has there been a exponential rise in a predator species ...
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Line 9, column 113, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...worldwide, but this is also means there a increase of natural hunters scavanging ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 264.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97348484848 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68478300944 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632575757576 0.468620217663 135% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.1098135392 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.363636364 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181543858783 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556963066782 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641086043806 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786273426787 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762765605112 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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