A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
In the above argument, the author concludes that, in the Bay Area, the Captain Seafood restaurant could have a good reputation and could be profitable by selling seafood. The author comes to this conclusion because the people nowadays have become more conscious about their health, leading to the restaurant getting more attention from the people in the area.. However, there are some unwarranted assumptions which are not cited explicitly in the argument that need some attention. Thus, the author needs to answer three questions in order to make the argument more persuasive.
First, is the study that has been conducted regarding the recent sales reliable? Has this study been conducted at only a few restaurants (The passage never says they conducted the study at restaurants)? Most importantly, in the past few years most of the things have changed (You need to use maybe language here…perhaps things have changed). Perhaps the study that was conducted which consider that the consumption of seafood has increased by 30% may have taken few restaurant chains as the part of their study, for which it’s nearly impossible to say the actual scenario that’s after five year. The study source may not have any reliable source. Perhaps, the study, when conducted has been confined to a limited area. Additionally, it may be possible that some restaurants might not have participated in the study. These assumptions, if true, will surely weaken the conclusion.
Second, another question is that if there is any possibility of existence of any restaurant whose specialty is seafood? The author presented in the argument that there is not any restaurant in the Bay Area whose specialty is seafood. If this was true then how the consumption of the seafood has been increased significantly? Perhaps, there may be a case the author might have failed to get to know about the specialty of each and every city restaurant whether it is a small one being run by the locals or it can be a joint venture of different group of people or it’s a renowned one. Perhaps, the one the known restaurant chains might not be specialized in the seafood. But, simultaneously, there may be a case, for which, he might have failed to take small restaurants which are run by the small groups, earn their living by fishing which can be correlated to the supplying of seafood in their restaurant or small outlets. These might have a significant effect on the author’s assumptions.
Third, the income of the people especially in the middle class families could be linked to healthy living? There may be case the major proportion of the families in the Area are two-income families which makes the reader think twice that the profit of the Captain Seafood restaurants would increase. Most importantly, it’s is true that the people prefer home-cooked meals might include varieties of fruits and vegetables, to be considered healthy, which may or may not be vegetarian meal. Definitely, the sea-food is non-vegetarian which families may or may not prefer. Perhaps, the meals might include some seafood items which may include the fish that can be directly home-cooked, involves no restaurant link, albeit no direct profit for restaurant. The people in the area may consider the seafood which can be cooked at home at minimum cost and usage of oil and spices which may put restaurants of no use. The arguments, if prove true may have a significant effect on the unfounded assumptions of the author,
To sum up, the evidences in the assumptions assumes that the profit of the Captain Seafood restaurant may increase but it’s dependent on the fact that the studies that were conducted were from reliable sources which may not jeopardize the situation that is in the restaurants in the Area. Furthermore, if we assume, the assumptions, cited by the author, if proved true, may not help the reader to come on to concrete conclusion about the profit margin of the restaurant for which the reader may reader may remain skeptical.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 668 350
No. of Characters: 3245 1500
No. of Different Words: 256 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.084 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.858 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 217 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 87 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.741 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.704 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.447 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...re attention from the people in the area.. However, there are some unwarranted ass...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to make the argument more persuasive. Not bad. Biggest issue is awkward phras...
^^^
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Biggest'.
Suggestion: The Biggest
... argument more persuasive. Not bad. Biggest issue is awkward phrasing and grammar. ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...issue is awkward phrasing and grammar. First, is the study that has been conduc...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ue, will surely weaken the conclusion. I'll stop here. Your ideas are not...
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Line 7, column 425, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...you with English grammar and phrasing. Also make sure that you read as much native ...
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Line 7, column 430, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...ith English grammar and phrasing. Also make sure that you read as much native Engli...
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Line 7, column 591, Rule ID: YOUR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'you're' or 'you are'?
Suggestion: you're; you are
...s the problem. It's mostly likely your writing skills. I think they can impro...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ver, with diligent focus and practice. Second, another question is that if ther...
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Line 11, column 490, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'reader may'.
Suggestion: reader may
... margin of the restaurant for which the reader may reader may remain skeptical.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, third, thus, i think, in conclusion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.6327345309 204% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 41.0 12.9520958084 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 36.0 13.6137724551 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 55.5748502994 153% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3967.0 2260.96107784 175% => OK
No of words: 794.0 441.139720559 180% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99622166247 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.3082959231 4.56307096286 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.778156259 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 333.0 204.123752495 163% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419395465995 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1200.6 705.55239521 170% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 17.0 8.76447105788 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 19.7664670659 192% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.1405159774 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.394736842 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197802225468 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498709969367 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627896821945 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0920581215442 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695150060451 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 98.500998004 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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