While it may be true that offspring‘s cortisol production depends on birth order, the author does not explain the correlation between birth order and exact cortisol decrement. The author’s argument is full of biases and cannot make the proper connection between clues.
The author reports firstborn infants produce twice cortisol relative to younger siblings. However, the author doesn’t explain the hormone reduction trend in following sibling. Perhaps there are no differences at the hormone production level between second and third born monkey. As far as this variation is not examined, it is impossible to issue a general rule for the effect of birth order.
The author implied that because of the firstborn humans’ high-level cortisol production, the firstborn infant monkeys also will obey this relation. Although some similarities founded between monkey tribes and human, and it could encourage scientist to investigate more evidence to prove the assumption, it is not enough to convince the editor of the scientific journal.
Additionally, the author mentions another finding that first-time pregnant monkeys had a higher level of cortisol relative to who had several offspring. Although this is another clue to prove the study, the exact increment of cortisol remains vague and ambiguous. The final result of the study must be certified by running the analytical tests on data, for example, a t-test, to show that the higher level of hormone is significant and reliable.
This study discovers important clues to prove the assumption but there were some logical fallacies in explanation to persuade the editor of the scientific journal.
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and suppo 50
- A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys 23
- “In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.” 76
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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samples:
https://www.testbig.com/story/gre-argument-essay-topic-2-outline
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1376 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.292 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.66 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.511 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.652 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 259.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55984555985 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88701384029 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583011583012 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8903880096 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199507859241 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691194732867 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378009702295 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105280047689 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336693454024 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.