A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring.
From the given argument it is stated that study is conducted on eighteen rhesus monkey to know the effects of birth order. The result showed that effects of birth order of first born monkeys are similar to that of first born humans.By this I can tell in general when human mother gives a second off spring the mother becomes more weak compared to when she gives first off spring. Simarily hormone levels she will be having less compared .So in accordance with it I agree the statement in the argument given First Time mother monkeys will have higher levels of cortisols than did those who had had several offspring.
As for the first infant monkey producing twice amount of cortsiol, I say that generally first born humans are more stronger,active,immune than the younger one as per statistics found in national health organistaion. It is found that a human mother will be more caring towards her health and all the pregnancy related things following in particular which are required to be maintained for good health of their baby Since its their first time and when it comes to second they will be like its the same thing so no need to worry more and they start neglecting the things and which leads to less levels of hormones and all limits that to be maintained will not be proper. So it will be same in case of the monkeys also. By that I can agree that First born infant monkeys produce twice the amount of cortisol but for the next born off springs,I say that it will be less.
So I say that study conducted on rhesus monkeys and its results are quite accurate since monkeys and humans behaviour are same not only in case of pregnancy. As we know monkeys are the first one to born on the planet and then remaining all living beings emerged from them. So Its a correct statemnt that monkeys behaviour and humans are same in all aspects.
- A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual s levels of stimulation The study showed that in stimulating situations such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey firstborn infant monkeys prod 40
- To understand the most important characteristics of a society one must study its major cities 66
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1492 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.44 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.161 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.155 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.426 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.426 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'monkey' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'monkeys'.
Suggestion: monkeys
...t study is conducted on eighteen rhesus monkey to know the effects of birth order. The...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: By
...re similar to that of first born humans.By this I can tell in general when human m...
^^
Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... levels she will be having less compared .So in accordance with it I agree the sta...
^^
Line 1, column 439, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...evels she will be having less compared .So in accordance with it I agree the state...
^^
Line 1, column 590, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
... levels of cortisols than did those who had had several offspring. As for the first in...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 111, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...ay that generally first born humans are more stronger,active,immune than the younger one as p...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , active
...ally first born humans are more stronger,active,immune than the younger one as per stat...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 420, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ned for good health of their baby Since its their first time and when it comes to s...
^^^
Line 2, column 487, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...en it comes to second they will be like its the same thing so no need to worry more...
^^^
Line 2, column 587, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun levels is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...eglecting the things and which leads to less levels of hormones and all limits that ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 710, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... it will be same in case of the monkeys also. By that I can agree that First born in...
^^^^
Line 2, column 837, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...rtisol but for the next born off springs,I say that it will be less. So I say tha...
^^
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...all living beings emerged from them. So Its a correct statemnt that monkeys behavio...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, then, as for, in general, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55421686747 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41007526163 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454819277108 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.312396369 57.8364921388 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.2 119.503703932 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 23.324526521 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163761808537 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983916693265 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705087693908 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133905998672 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518296715808 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.