At first glance, it may seem logical to agree with the author's argument that the consumption of salicylates will reduce the amount of headaches seen in the residents of Menticia. The evidence presented is it in the same chemical family as aspirin and the correlation between commercial use of this chemical and steady decline of headaches reported by participants in a twenty year old study. There are many flaws in this argument; therefore, I will discuss what questions need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument of which it's based on are reasonable.
Firstly, just because chemicals are within the same family doesn't mean that they will have the same effect if consumed in proper dosages. Although aspirin is very effective at treating headaches, we have don't have any actual scientific data to suggest that salicylates will have the same effect as this commonly used over-the-counter medication. Until the scientific literature supports the notion that this chemically similar compound produces similar results, we cannot make assumptions on its' effectiveness.
Secondly, correlation does not equal causation. There can be many other factors that contributed to the participants of the study experiencing a decline in the average number of headaches reported. We have no way of knowing if the amount of caffeine the participants consumed was reduced or if the people of Mentia who participated averaged more hours of sleep per night than prior to the study. Without randomized, double-blind placebo control trials, we cannot conclude that this effect is due the consumption of salicycates.
Thirdly, mentioning that 'some health experts' predict that Menticia's residents will have a decline the the amount of headaches experienced does not provide specific evidence as to who these health experts are and what their credentials are. If these so-called 'health experts' are hollistic doctors who have drawn this conclusion based on anecdotal evidence with the patients they've worked with, we would only have very-low levels of confidence that the successes were due to these chemicals. Thus, it is imperative that we only draw conclusions about the effectiveness of salicylates from the results of randomized control trials.
In summary, many holes exist within this argument and for the reasons that I have thoroughly discussed above the three questions that need to be answered: does being within the same chemical family mean that they will have similar effects, does the correlation of decline in headaches seen and consumption of salicylates equal causation, and who are these 'health experts' that the author points to as people of authority. There may be some validity to the claims this author makes; however, more specific evidence is needed in order to provide proof to back up these claims.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2351 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.167 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.794 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.405 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
..., it may seem logical to agree with the authors argument that the consumption of salicy...
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Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...se chemicals are within the same family doesnt mean that they will have the same effec...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ffective at treating headaches, we have dont have any actual scientific data to sugg...
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...Menticias residents will have a decline the the amount of headaches experienced does no...
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...Menticias residents will have a decline the the amount of headaches experienced does no...
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Line 7, column 374, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they've
...on anecdotal evidence with the patients theyve worked with, we would only have very-lo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, as to, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29867256637 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85477024864 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493362831858 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.7193044233 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.666666667 119.503703932 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1333333333 23.324526521 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196122812213 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702306026593 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687615622233 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11516102912 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564289336408 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 48.3550499002 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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