SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
While the author of this paragraph may, in fact, believe that SuperCorp is a fantastic company that is able transform the community of Corporateville, this argument is subjective, and perhaps more importantly, logically is not sound. There are many holes in this argument.
The comparison between Middlesburg and Corporateville is subjective and the argument untidy. What exactly makes a community better than another? Many citizens may beleive that a suburban life is ideal, yet conversely, many others may believe that a urban life is better. Whoever wrote this argument automatically discounts that personal preference does not equate to superiority. This sort of blind subjectivity does not make for a strong argument. Though its workers may perfer to live in an area that is not urban, Middlesburg may have its own set of perks, or a certain pastiche, which another company prefers. Personal preference is subjective, not objective.
What makes an area superior? Lower taxes does not always equate to a town a la Pleasantville. Lower taxes is not a zero sum game. This argument overlooks netagive attributes of lower taxes such as low-resource schools, broken infrastructure, and an overall decline of public needs. Degredation of essential needs such as education can have a negative effect in the long term. For example, the lack of quality education can, in the not-too-distant future, engender communities that have little to offer society. Idle hands, so the saying goes, turn towards the devil's work - crime, burglary - unhealthy for a prosperous society. There is potentai that a lower-taxed community may have negative impacts in the future. Higher taxes, while may appear to be personally beneficial in the short-term, provide public goods and services that are needed to maintain a pleasant atmosphere.
A recent surge in homeowners can be attributable to many factors. Perhaps a healthy economy equiped with low interest rates lends itself to an increase in housing development. But this fact alone does not mean that Corporateville is superior. While there may be many new houses, there could be many negative attribtes to Corporateville. Readers are not told its location, if it isolated and far removed from airports or other cities. Middlesburg may have more amenties, convenience, and social interaction.
There could be other reasons why SuperCorp decided to locate in Corporateville, unrelated to taxes. Perhaps the proxcimity to shipping distributors or this particular city put in the highest bid.
There are many assumptions within the argument. Nonsequitors litter the paragraph and weaken its argument.
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- SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Mi 69
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK. The survey is only about where to live, not where to work. If the survey was about a working place, the result might be different. Workers might want their headquarters to be placed at urban because they can commute using public transportations, or other firms, which they interact with, might be concentrated in urban area, and et cetera.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 2158 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.251 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.982 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.679 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.182 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.252 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.467 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...onversely, many others may believe that a urban life is better. Whoever wrote thi...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whoever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ay believe that a urban life is better. Whoever wrote this argument automatically disco...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, if, look, may, so, while, for example, in fact, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43309002433 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10859298006 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557177615572 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 724.5 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.3717636727 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.75 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6785714286 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89285714286 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106151115918 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289877408322 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424928970923 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0572191380676 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367614207975 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 40.34 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.62 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 98.500998004 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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