In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Even if Mason City Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities, the author doesn't put together a compelling argument for City government to increment the budget for riverside recreational facilities. Author's arguments are equivocal and contains many loop holes and thus could undermine a strong case for budget increase.
Firstly the survey which Author refers to is very vague. There could be other activities that residents might have chosen as favorites in addition to water sports. Those other activities may be more convenient and feasible all year around as compared to water sports, thus resulting in low usage of Mason River for water sport purposes. Also the validity of survey is obscure as to whether the survey takers were mostly riverside residents or other Urban population was also included. Urban population might not be that much into water sports as compared to riverside residents. Hence authentication & validation of survey from an independent organization is a must before making an argument for budget increase.
Moreover assumption of the river quality as the major factor for less use of Mason River for water sports also seems somewhat stretched. There is no mention to any kind of research studies or references or stats that show river quality inapt for water sports. Therefore assuming States efforts of river cleaning will lead to much increase in water sports is not correct and therefore cannot be used as a strong argument for monetary increment of Mason City's budget towards riverside recreational facilities.
Furthermore not sure how much success will State be able to achieve in river cleaning goal itself as there could be many many factors involved like environment, near by industries etc etc..There could be environmental related flora & fauna contributing to the river's bad quality & smell. These environmental factors might not let the river cleaning act to succeed much. Same when thinking about near by industries. Their contribution to the river quality needs to be studied thoroughly and could be very time consuming to bring any change in the industries. Hence assuming feasibility of river cleaning as yes seems farfetched in itself.
Also implication of increase in water sports after river cleanup is not backed by facts. Will there be significant increase in water sports? or just minute increase which would mean diverting funds towards riverside recreational areas unnecessary.
All these issues and aspects would have to be dealt with, to lobby a strong case for increase of City's budget towards riverside recreational areas.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2200 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.251 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.944 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.598 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'Mason City'.
Suggestion: Mason City
Even if Mason City Mason City residents rank water sports swimming, b...
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...boating and fishing among their favorite recreational activities, the author does...
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...e recreational activities, the author doesnt put together a compelling argument for ...
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...ivities that residents might have chosen as favorites in addition to water sports...
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...nvenient and feasible all year around as compared to water sports, thus resulting...
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...f Mason River for water sport purposes. Also the validity of survey is obscure as ...
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...lso the validity of survey is obscure as to whether the survey takers were mostly riverside...
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...ts as compared to riverside residents. Hence authentication & validation of survey f...
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... is a must before making an argument for budget increase. Moreover assumption ...
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...ver for water sports also seems somewhat stretched. There is no mention to any ki...
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... stats that show river quality inapt for water sports. Therefore assuming States ...
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...river quality inapt for water sports. Therefore assuming States efforts of river cleani...
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...ys budget towards riverside recreational facilities. Furthermore not sure how ...
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
...riverside recreational facilities. Furthermore not sure how much success will State be...
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...r cleaning goal itself as there could be many many factors involved like environm...
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...leaning goal itself as there could be many many factors involved like environment, near...
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Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
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...many factors involved like environment, near by industries etc etc..There could be envi...
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...nvironment, near by industries etc etc..There could be environmental related flora ...
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...tc..There could be environmental related flora & fauna contributing to the rivers...
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...factors might not let the river cleaning act to succeed much. Same when thinking ...
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Suggestion: Hence,
... to bring any change in the industries. Hence assuming feasibility of river cleaning...
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Suggestion: Also,
...g as yes seems farfetched in itself. Also implication of increase in water sports...
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...cked by facts. Will there be significant increase in water sports? or just minute...
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...significant increase in water sports? or just minute increase which would mean d...
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...nds towards riverside recreational areas unnecessary. All these issues and as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48681055156 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78268455513 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510791366906 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4254403026 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.4 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 5.15768463074 465% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308813937388 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091768543708 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111815025386 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943266180787 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120997665038 0.0628817314937 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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