In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The Argument is flawed in numerous ways, as it does not mention the reason for the river being polluted. One reason could be the industries located around the mansion river. Most of the industries in mansion city, prefer leaving the waste to the river as it is a cost cutting process. From the above stated argument, it can be inferred that the government has a plan to clean up once, if that is true the river again becomes polluted over a period of time. Even if the clean up happens on the regular basis, the chemicals that are spread in the river will be injurious to health.
Even if the government starts clean up, During the period of the clean up the people would have gone in search of another sport. So the government idea that the people of mansion city to come back to the river side for the recreational activities will be flawed. Additionally, The people of the mansion city before the clean up would have experienced serious health issues because of the chemicals present in the river, So even if the clean up happens, the people are aware that the industries waste will be continuously sent to the river, because of this reason the people of the mansion city will always hold a negative impression on the plans of the government to clean up the mansion river.
Second, the government has just announced the plan. There is no guarantee that the evet will happen. As we have seen in politics, many make fake promises and they fail to do the job. So there are chances that they have announced these statements so that they can attract votes for the next election. Generally at these type of events they showoff as if they are doing a great job and disappear after elections. There are less chances that the government will hold on promises for the clean up of the mansion river.
Lastly, the people of the mansion city would have moved out to a different town because pollutants in the river has caused a serious effects on there health. And the water was no longer useful for there daily activities. So if the government plans to clean up the river, there are less chances that the people will visit the place again, with this the government should rethink in allotting money in there current budget.
Therefore, there are less chances for the people of the mansion city to get engaged in the recreational activities because the argument is flawed in numerous ways
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- In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes littl 43
- In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes littl 42
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 1918 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.524 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.338 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.5 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...the river again becomes polluted over a period of time. Even if the clean up happens on the re...
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Line 9, column 423, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...d disappear after elections. There are less chances that the government will hold o...
^^^^
Line 13, column 134, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...tants in the river has caused a serious effects on there health. And the water was no l...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 282, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... plans to clean up the river, there are less chances that the people will visit the ...
^^^^
Line 17, column 22, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rrent budget. Therefore, there are less chances for the people of the mansion c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, lastly, second, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66509433962 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40166959956 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.410377358491 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.4102792907 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.888888889 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 5.70786347227 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123568590434 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477662794635 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446895290177 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855444131437 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326274195212 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.3550499002 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.