Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Dr. Karp tries to investigate the question about the rearing system on Tertian Island. Recently he conducted the study that should have answered the question. Moreover, he finds the previous study of Dr. Field not accurate, because of its flaws in the method. Probably, Dr. Karp is right and the Field's study was not accurate, however, Dr. Karp's argumentation, which is given in the text, is not so obvious and clear. Hence, in order to be sure whether the Dr. Karp is right, he should answer important questions, otherwise, he ventures to make a wrong conclusion.
The given passage states that Dr. Karp study was made recently, while Dr. Field study was conducted 20 years ago. There is no doubt that such a considerable time span should be questioned. Especially, considering, a today pace of the global development, it easily could be true that the investigated island was subjected to the steep changing. For example, its culture and tradition could be changed to Western type. Consequently, in order to be sure whether doctors investigated the same culture and the same traditions, this question should be answered firstly. Otherwise, it may undermine the whole Dr. Karp argumentation.
Even if the first question is answered positively, another question is still serious one. The given passage states that Dr. Karp interviewed children from group of islands. However, it is not clear whether Dr. Karp interviewed children from Tertia Island. If it was not made, the Dr. Karp conclusion about Dr. Field method could be turned wrong, because it is obviously that the subject of the study should be the same. Otherwise, it is quite risky to make a scientific conslusion basing only the suggestion. Hence, this qustion cannot be left without the answer.
The last question is about children's answers. The Dr. Karp claims that children talk about their parents. But, such a general assertion could mean everything. Probably, Dr. Field was right and children are reared by the whole village, and the children just miss their parents, and so, they express their emotions. Hence, did Dr. Karp ask children direclty about who bring them up? It will shed a light on the problem.
To sum up, Dr. Karp makes quite a brave conclusion about dr. Field method, however, at the same time; his argumentation needs to be more accurate and solid, because it has serious flaws in it. In order to avoid it, the pointed question should be answered.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Otherwise, it is quite risky to make a scientific conslusion basing only the suggestion.
Error: conslusion Suggestion: conclusion
Sentence: Hence, this qustion cannot be left without the answer.
Error: qustion Suggestion: question
Sentence: Hence, did Dr. Karp ask children direclty about who bring them up?
Error: direclty Suggestion: directly
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method. //maybe none of the method is correct
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1962 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.821 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.531 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.728 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.484 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 364, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...id Dr. Karp ask children direclty about who bring them up? It will shed a light on ...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248936170213 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.153191489362 0.15541462614 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0851063829787 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0702127659574 0.0520304965353 135% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0468085106383 0.0272364105082 172% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0851063829787 0.125424944231 68% => OK
Participles: 0.0382978723404 0.0416121511921 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66867568156 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0212765957447 0.026700313972 80% => OK
Particles: 0.00425531914894 0.001811407834 235% => OK
Determiners: 0.0893617021277 0.113004496875 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0276595744681 0.0255425247493 108% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0063829787234 0.0127820249294 50% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2447.0 2731.13054187 90% => OK
No of words: 407.0 446.07635468 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01228501229 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331695331695 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.262899262899 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189189189189 0.208842608468 91% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113022113022 0.135150697306 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66867568156 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 207.018472906 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4914004914 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 53.7662591982 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 16.28 23.2022227129 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9637242334 57.7814097925 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.88 141.986410481 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.28 23.2022227129 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.724660767414 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 42.5699262899 51.9672348444 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.37795275591 1.8405768891 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223974612 0.441005458295 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0957517615631 0.135418324435 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0860441313692 0.0829849096947 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.480326339 0.58762219726 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.159129013943 0.147661913831 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835525168066 0.193483328276 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476516498401 0.0970749176394 49% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.395691149411 0.42659136922 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.121697751568 0.0774707102158 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153389413511 0.312017818177 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219179952642 0.0698173142475 31% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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