Based on the facts that Workers in Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in Masonton and that relative to population size stress-related illness is proportionally much less reported in Leeville than in Masonton, the Leeville Chamber of Commerce concludes that the people living in the smaller city of Leeville live a relatively relaxed pace of life and benefit from it. The argument is well presented but not well reasoned, not strong enough to lead to the conclusion the author want. Following problems serve to undermine the argument.
First and foremost, the author of the argument presents evidence that workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton to support the conclusion. However, the author is falling to consider other possible alternatives to the fewer sick days. It is possible that workers in Leeville is facing so harsh employment conditions that they could not be free to take sick days when they want, which is much more unhealthy compared with their counterparts in the large city of Masoton. To strengthen the argument, the author would benefit from implementing a normed survey asking the workers in the two cities the detailed situation about whether they can take sick days as they want.
The author reasonably assumes that fact that there are fewer records of stress-related illness in Leeville than in Masonton relative to population size. The argument suggests that the fact results from much fewer stressful jobs in the smaller city, which in consequence leads too much relaxed pace of life. The author nevertheless do not take in consideration that the opposite may be true as well. Actually, the smaller city could have much higher amount of stressed jobs. Perhaps the workers here are less vulnerable to the stressed working environment, or maybe the most of their wages are not high enough to afford these workers to go to hospitals and check stress-related illness. Unless the connection between the lower diagnosis of stress-related illness and the relaxed pace of life is representative, valid and reliable, it could not be used to effectively back the argument.
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 58
- Ten years ago,as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program,the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway.Subsequently,several factories were constructed there,crime rates in the area d 66
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 50
- Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, l 66
- Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ce leads too much relaxed pace of life. The author nevertheless do not take in cons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11581920904 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78732264807 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474576271186 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.5237996871 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.307692308 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.520228529565 0.218282227539 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169620826933 0.0743258471296 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177608402873 0.0701772020484 253% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.373795743493 0.128457276422 291% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0708319305503 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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