Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author believes that Palean baskets were not originally made by Palean people. However, the evidence offered by the author is insufficient.
To begin with, we need more information about the geography and climate in the area at the time to address the likelihood of different scenarios. While the memo states that the baskets could only be carried by boats that have not been found. However, more information about the river between the two villages is needed. For instance, if the river was narrow and shallow, people lived in Lithos and Palean could trade the baskets at that time. What's more, maybe the weather was cold at the time and the river was frozen during the winter. People from the two villages could easily walk across the river.
We also need to know the material and technologies used by Palean and Lithoian people for building the boats. The author claims that there was no Palean boats have been found, so they could not have the possibility to cross the river. Still, what if people from two villages used the special material to build the boats? For example, Maybe they had built the boats but the material they used could not withstand the time and left no traces for archaeologists to discover. The absence of traces of boats does not imply no boats were available then. More information regarding these issues is needed.
Another important piece of evidence we need is about the material of the baskets. Specifically, we have to know whether the baskets could float in the water. It is possible that some of the baskets had been dumped by Palean people to the river and carried by the water to the other land of the river and then picked up by the Lithoian people.
To strengthen the argument, the author would have to provide more information as above mentioned.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 311 350
No. of Characters: 1448 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.199 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.656 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.291 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.046 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the likelihood of different scenarios. While the memo states that the baskets could ...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...n could trade the baskets at that time. Whats more, maybe the weather was cold at the...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 179, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...float in the water. It is possible that some of the baskets had been dumped by Palean peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 311.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83279742765 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37952984892 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450160771704 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0127517845 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.5 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2777777778 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189052021799 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674476454408 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804084674567 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11780740888 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047889194468 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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