Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The article that is given strongly express the idea that woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern is not uniquely Palean’s based on the discovery of the “Palean” basket in Lithos, which is at the other side of the deep, broad river. However, there are some logical misconstrue to make such conclusion.
The article mentioned that there is the Brim river which crosses between two cities. However, we should consider the possibility that the river at the prehistorical stage was not at the location on today. Just a century ago, Han river, the river that crosses Seoul, was not above Jamsil station, it was going below the Jamsil station. The massive flood in the early 1900s changed the path of the river. The flow that river goes could be easily changed, so the writer of the article should closely examine that whether the two cities was also divided back then.
The article also missed the point that the boats of Paleans could have existed. Until 18th centuries, the material of the boat was mainly wood. There would be no big difference at the prehistorical stage, so we could easily purport that the boats of Paleans was made of wood. Then there would be nothing weird about the boats was never discovered, it is because the boats had already got decayed and went back to soil. The writer should search more specific evidence that the Paleans didn’t have the ability to build boats such as no figure of the boat on the walls of their caves.
Even if the river sustained its position and the Palean really didn’t know how to build the boats, the author is still missing one possibility that the baskets had floated from Palean to Lithos by luck. One of the Palean citizens might have accidently thrown their valuable basket to the river. The citizens of Lithos, who didn’t know how to make such baskets may have found the basket on other side of the river after a few days. By this single incident, it is possible that the basket that originally made in Palean could be found in Lithos. To make the thesis that the Palean basket is not unique stronger, the author should suggest more powerful evidence that other scholars could accept such as discovering the basket production site.
The statement that the Palean basket was not only made and used in Palean but also was made and used in Lithos and its buttress showed in the article is interesting, but to make the statement as true, the author should make more discoveries to break such logical weaknessses.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2009 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.597 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.25 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.769 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...o cities was also divided back then. The article also missed the point that t...
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...he boat on the walls of their caves. Even if the river sustained its position...
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...covering the basket production site. The statement that the Palean basket was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84792626728 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47351706052 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453917050691 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6968012652 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.888888889 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38888888889 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162970118599 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555626207488 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477767632186 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975438880206 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497528234092 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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