Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author describes certain archaeological surveys in the above passage in which he put light on the existence of Palean baskets. He tells us that earlier it was firmly believed that Palean baskets were of origin from the prehistoric village of Palea, but from recent discoveries, the statement seems to be quite doubtful. Further he also inappropriately concludes without any solid proof that the Baskets are not of origin of Paleans. As he fails to consider all scenarios, this makes his argument weak.
Firstly, the author describes the existence of Palean baskets in the prehistoric village of Palea and makes the statement that "have been made only by the Palean people". While making such a statement, the author doesn't provide us with any specific evidence that brings us to the conclusion. Many questions arise in absence of information about the held survey such as the period in which the survey was carried out, recipients considered in the survey, reliability of sources, and many more. Making any kind of conclusion without resolving these doubts is not acceptable.
Further, the author tells us about another village across the Brim River from Palea where the traces of Palean basket were found. But, he further tells as the traces of Palean boats was not found, so, reachability to the village is doubtful. This is a vague assumption that the absence of a boat signifies unreachability. There may be an alternative explanation for this situation such as the use of dismantlable wood logs as transport, destroyed boats to cut off the connection, found of some other way to reach the village(bridge), and many more. Also, we are talking about a very ancient village, so, some evidence may have vanished. Thus, the author must not make such reef assumptions.
While concluding the author adds, these Palean baskets are found at other places they are not uniquely Palean. While making such a statement the author assumes that the object is of that origin wherever it is found. But, this can't be the case, for example, the chilly being heavily cultivated in India in current days is originated from European countries. Similarly, alternative explanations of these statements can be Paleans may have carried out trade in those days, thus, the commodity is found in different villages. It is also possible that after some time they have stopped making commodities or have adopted advanced commodities on the current one. Thus, due to the presence of such alternative solutions, the statement can't be directly accepted.
Finally, I would like to suggest the author support his statement with some more solid pieces of evidence to accept his conclusion of Baskets being not of origin of Paleans.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 446 350
No. of Characters: 2204 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.942 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.667 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.464 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.307 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ile making such a statement, the author doesnt provide us with any specific evidence t...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... origin wherever it is found. But, this cant be the case, for example, the chilly be...
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Line 4, column 728, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ch alternative solutions, the statement cant be directly accepted. Finally, I would...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, similarly, so, thus, while, for example, kind of, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10112359551 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78435581298 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1894475271 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.095238095 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1904761905 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175743868909 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522016636564 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707230211514 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923046579133 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378790893113 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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