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The argument leaves so many questions unanswered and makes so many sweeping generalizations that significantly hampers the merit of the argument.
The first and foremost question that needs to be answered is that how the advertising director assumed that the decrease in the number of people attending the Super-screen movies is because the content of the reviews is not reaching the prospective viewers. This is an unwarranted assumption to which no specific evidence has been provided. To support this claim, they need to draw a parallel comparison with some similar incidents.
Further, they concluded that the problem is not with the quality of the movies but with the public's lack of awareness. They assumed that because people are not watching the movies produced by the Super-screen, they are unaware of the good quality movies. This assumption doesn't have the legs to stand on. It could be the case that people don't like the content of the movies produced by the Super-screen or they got more inclined towards some other production company.
Moreover, the recommendation that the Super Screen should allocate a greater share of its budget for advertising is unreasonable as it is based on the above assumptions. Allocating a greater share to its budget for advertising might not help until they know the actual cause or the reason behind the decrease in the number of people. Firstly by finding out the actual reason and then working on it would be the way to go.
Thus, we can conclude that by leaving so many questions unanswered the recommendation is redundant in nature. It fails to strike a chord with the reader. On purely logical grounds and the questions that underlie this argument, one can't agree with the recommendation.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1431 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.934 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.828 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.497 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...he good quality movies. This assumption doesnt have the legs to stand on. It could be ...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nd on. It could be the case that people dont like the content of the movies produced...
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Line 5, column 469, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... towards some other production company. Moreover, the recommendation that the Su...
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Line 9, column 232, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...stions that underlie this argument, one cant agree with the recommendation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 288.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88180220533 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538194444444 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4789678285 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.218282227539 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0743258471296 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.128457276422 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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