94 The effectiveness of a country s leaders is best measured by examining the well being of that country s citizens Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position

Whether the health of a country’s citizens most appropriately measures the effectiveness of its leaders is a bone of contention. The prompt suggests that it is the best of measures for judging leaders’ effectiveness. However, in my opinion, the well-being of the citizens partially indicates the latter, and hence, cannot be declared as the “best” measure. The reasons for such perspective are due to two reasons, depending on the contexts in which the statement can be tested.

The statement holds value when we consider the aspects of maintaining rules and regulations in a hospital. For example, in 2023, Dr. Sanjukta Saha, a renowned gynae in Bangladesh in Central Hospital, Dhaka, was held responsible for surreptitiously using another junior doctor for operating on a pregnant mother, due to her stay abroad at that time. The patient’s family members were not informed of the occurrence, and the event led to the mother’s death. This was possible due to inattention to maintaining rigid rules and regulations regarding surgeries and communication in the hospital, which are supposed to be monitored by government officials, that is, leaders in the government health sector. One can say that it is the responsibility of the hospital management to maintain the regulations. However, it is under the jurisdiction of government health officials to develop a policy and implement it in reality.

On a varying note, the statement in the prompt fails to hold water if we take a look at the current dengue-situation in Bangladesh. Mortality rate from dengue has soared high never like before. One of the main reasons for prolific dengue mosquito reproduction is unclean environment, which has to be ensured by each household. With a population of 170 million in the country, it is not feasible for the government health sector leaders to visit each household for monitoring and evaluation. All they can do is to make the policies, develop the regulations for maintaining an environment that does not encourage dengue spread. The rest of the responsibility actually lies in the hands of the citizens themselves. Cleanliness and awareness about the situation are necessary to remedy this terrible dengue endemic. Critics of this view can point fingers at the government officials for not spreading enough mosquito repellants in each neighborhood. However, if we look at the culture of Bangladeshi citizens, and realise that they have a tendency to consistently keep their surrounding unclean, which cannot be remedied by any government, no matter how diligent in their duty they are.

To sum it up, the suggested statement in the prompt is a matter of convoluted reasoning and hence difficult to have a partisan overview of the situations. It is both the responsibility of the government leaders and the citizens themselves to keep their wellbeing intact.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether the health of a country’s citizens most...
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Line 5, column 833, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ble dengue endemic. Critics of this view can point fingers at the government offi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, however, if, look, regarding, so, well, as to, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27729257642 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21334556348 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519650655022 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7091883941 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.095238095 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8095238095 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15482396329 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471588693916 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490114372031 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106457004299 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767194293537 0.0667264976115 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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